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Review:patronus_charm says:
Here for the 12 days of reviewing over at the forums and Iím so glad that I am, because I have stumbled on yet another great Lucius/Narcissa story!

I really liked Narcissaís characterisation here because she seemed a lot more introspective and reflective than how I tend to see her and it was a really nice change. Her reflections on time were especially interesting because it really exposed her fear of it to us and drew us more into her character and how vulnerable she is and I really pitied her for being in this constant state of paranoia.

Another thing which really shone out in her personality was her love for her family and how much Draco and Lucius meant to her, and as this is such a key characteristic of hers it was great to see you place all the emphasis on it. This was really shone when Voldemort explained what he wanted Draco to do, and it was interesting to see her reaction to it immediately. Itís great that you have chosen this time in her life with all the conflicting emotions in it though.

I liked your description in this too, because it was just the right amount for getting it into my imagination and being able to understand the scene but it didnít overload me at the same time.

Voldemort was really great. He still managed to scare me but then it wasnít too much given that this is the Malfoy family and they are his supposed allies. It made me chuckle that he would drink tea because I never really pictured him either eating or drinking :P

The tension between them was really palpable at the end with them almost using whatís happening to Draco to air the issues that they have between them and it was really well written. Great chapter and Iíll see if I can read any more soon!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Kiana,

Thank you SO MUCH for the incredibly helpful and thought-out review. It really means a lot to me that you would take the time to really break down my story like that. :)

I don't update this story very often, but when I do its because I really felt a pull toward the characters and their story--which really helps me get into writing the next chapter. I think the dynamic between Narcissa and the entire situation surrounding Draco is just incredibly interesting and it doesn't really get focused on in the books, so I wanted to shed some light on the situation in my own writing.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story, it means a lot to me. :)

-KBD


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