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Review:Mrs Ravenclaus says:
Back again!

I liked how you delved into the normal Hogwarts timetable because it contrasted nicely with the madness which was going on with Remus and his transformation so that was a nice change. Lilyís thoughts about being then James at Potions made me chuckle because I can already see the beginnings of their love/hate relationship. Then there was the bit of Slytherin rivalry thrown in with James and Sirius being annoyed about being with them.

The astronomy lesson was really interesting with the reaction of Remus and I felt so bad for him because he really does have to cover his steps wherever he goes. You really portrayed young Remus really well with his nervousness and looking around to make sure that not too much had been given away or anything. Then there was that mean jibe from Sirius about parents wanting to be friends with him when it really wasnít his fault.

The moment between Remus and McGonagall while he was preparing for his transformation was really sweet and I just wanted to hug him because of it. She was really trying her best and there he was being so nervous. I particularly liked the part when he was wolf because I didnít expect and even thought it was brief we really got a sense of what he was like as one. If you could lengthen it even more that would be great because the brief snippet was written really well!

The ending was a nice bit of Marauders fluff to cheer us up from poor old Remus. I wonder how youíre going to tie him into the group with whether you wait until they found out heís a werewolf or whether itís done before. Either way itís very exciting!

Great chapter!

Author's Response: Ok, so I feel quite sad now that I am answering the last of my unanswered reviews from you! I liked them sitting in my unanswered box, ready to be re-read each time I logged on ;) But I also feel much better now that I have finally answered them (I was feeling rather -really- bad that I left it so long!)

I'm glad you liked that this chapter went into the normal Hogwarts timetable because I felt it had to at some point ;) Ha, I thought there had to be a bit of Slytherin rivalry, purely because of Sirius and his connection (and hatred of that connection) to the house.

I feel bad for Remus too :( It must have been a really tough time for him then. I was a bit mean to Remus here by putting through that astronomy lesson, but it had to be done! I'm really pleased you felt I portrayed young Remus well :) I'm looking forward to writing him as the Marauder we know and love... Sirius just needs to start being a bit nicer to him and Remus needs to stop worrying so much for that to happen :)

Again, I think Remus could do with a hug here, so go for it ;) McGonagall really was trying her best but I don't think she could have done anything to make him feel better at that particular point! I'm really glad you liked the part when he was a wolf and felt that it was written really well :) I may look into lengthening it, but there will be more transformations during the story. But as that first transformation is an important one maybe I should add more to it... I shall think about this :)

Initially I wanted to end this chapter with Remus, but I couldn't fit the scene with James and Sirius in at the start of the next chapter so it had to go in there - I'm glad you thought it was a nice way to cheer up the end of the chapter :) Ah, it won't be long before Remus starts to integrate with the Marauders - he has a lonely few chapters but he becomes a Marauder long before they find out about him being a werewolf! I'm really pleased you find it exciting :D

Thank you so much for all the wonderful reviews you have given me! As I said in the Secret Santa guessing thread - you are awesome :D

Haronione ♥


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