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Review:Mrs Ravenclaus says:
Hey itís Mrs Ravenclaus back again!

Aw, Remus was so cute in this chapter I just wanted to squish him! I felt so sorry for him when McGonagall was leading him to Dumbledore because I knew that there was nothing to fear because itís Dumbledore and heís a babe but he didnít know and gah it was so sad. Then it was made even worse when Pomfrey was there too and Remus was just so worried and anxious and cute and I think you wrote him perfectly!

I thought that Dumbledore was written really well and he was perfectly in character with his measured plans and tone of voice and the way he had absolutely everything covered. You really wrote him well and caught all the little things about him too which is rather hard to do from my experience so congrats on that!

I liked how you made Lily supportive of Remus when he wasnít there because it was a sign of their later closeness. It was rather odd to see Lily and her friends on good terms with the Marauders but thatís one of the perks of writing them as first years and itís so cute to see them like this. Another minor thing but a great nod to canon was Jamesí skill at transfiguration which was really great.

Of course them being pranksters they were going to get told off! That did leave me laughing seeing how stern McGonagall was being with them already though it didnít surprise me in the slightest. I hope they get up to more of these antics later on in the story.

Great chapter!

Author's Response: Why, hello again Mrs Ravenclaus :)

Aw, I think Remus could do with being squished a little bit ;) Of course he had nothing to fear, as you said, Dumbledore is a babe, but Remus is a worry-wart at the moment and so thought the worst. I am so glad you thought I wrote him perfectly :)

Ok, so I am stoked that you felt I had written Dumbledore really well and in character!! Thank you! I found it hard to write Dumbledore, so it is great that you have mentioned it here!

I'm glad you liked Lily's support of Remus here, Lily likes Remus and she feels protective(?) of him. There are a few Lily/Remus moments throughout this story that will lead to their later closeness :) Ha, it is odd to have them on good terms with the Marauders, but I felt there needed to be a few 'incidents' before Lily and her friends decide they really don't like them, I just felt it would be more realistic.

Ha, I'm glad you enjoyed them being told off :) Of course they had to be found out and punished! Plus, I needed them to be in detention on Friday ;) Haha, of course they will get up to more antics throughout the story... they wouldn't be James and Sirius if they didn't!

Thanks for the fab review!

Haronione ♥


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