Hey Sam! This is your Secret Santa speaking (well, not much of a secret now is it? :P)! I am here to leave you as many reviews as I can because I have just realized I've been a great fool for never reading something of yours. I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this first chapter! I am literally dying to see what happens next.
As you may, or may not know, I am obsessed with reading about the more unknown characters. Those characters that rarely get the spotlight, both in Rowling's books (for obvious reasons..I mean, she couldn't have focused on all of the characters, right?) and in fanfiction as well. I must admit, this is the first story on Theodore Nott that I've ever tried and I am already fascinated by your style and your amazing storytelling. You are so well-versed in terms of vocabulary, richness of the descriptions and character building. Theo is more of an OC than an established character, so naturally, creating him and his voice from scratch mustn't have been easy, and yet, I felt he has a definitive note to his personality I like. And it didn't seem forced at all! His opposition to Voldemort felt very natural because you've established his past and his relationships with his father and other significant people in his life, which in my opinion is a very smart thing to do. I mean, in real life, you rarely see people taking decisions that are completely different from the way they were raised without a good cause backing them up.
Absolutely lovely writing Sam hunny. The only suggestion I'd have is to focus a bit more on the action sequence (that part when Theo runs away from the Death Eaters). Linger a little longer on his feelings as he runs away from them, make him take a few bad turns in his panic and haste to escape, etc. It would create a deeper sense of tension and gravity of the situation. I mean, if he's caught, he's done for. That's got to be terrifying for him.
Anyways, I can hardly wait to read the next chapter!!
*hugs from Santa*
Author's Response: Hey!
Unknown characters are love, I wish I could write them all. For now, I'll settle for Theo, as he is my favorite. :D Theo has been built up for a long time, so his voice comes very naturally to me. It makes me very happy to know that you like him and it doesn't feel forced.
Yes, I plan to go back and make the action part better, with his feelings and such. But Theo is a planner who knows Malfoy manor better than anyone except his father and, well, the Malfoys, so he won't make a bad turn because the way he needs to go is pretty much all he's focusing on. "Don't get caught." - That what he things until he's outside and can hear them. :)
Thank you so much for leaving a review!