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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hi! I'm here for the second of the Twelve Days of Reviewing Challenge.

I really can't think of anything to say now. I'm so glad your oneshot has no banner yet, because I absolutely loved reading it. I haven't read much about Dudley, expecially when he was an adult, and even less about him thinking and relfecting on his action from childhood. The content of this was both unique and engaging, and you pulled it off perfectly.

How you wrote Dudley was plain amazing. He's really grown, and developed, but he's the same Dudley we knew in the series, and now he's repenting for his earlier actions. His speech was plain amazing, and I have tears in my eyes from reading it. He's somehow conflicting inside, and he knoews his family wouldn't or doesn't approve of his making such a speech in tribute of Harry but he goes and des it anyway. I think you've really transformed Dudley, and shown his good side to us, and now I'm finding him a much more tolerable character, someone I like.

I loved your use of the phrase 'waste of space'. Harry did feel like a waste of space, and it feels right that the phrase which brings Dudley to his senses would be waste of space.

I loved the description of wherever the speech was held - I'm guessing that it was in Hogwarts, but I love the bewilderment with which Dudley tries his best to find his way around, and then get oout at the end, it was both realistic and amusing. I loved that little sentence at the beginning, where Dudley said he wasn't in the habit of asking people for help, and I think that came through in the chapter. You've done an amazing job characterising Dudley here. :)

The reuniting and reconcilation of the two brothers at the end was wonderful as well - even though we see him through Dudley's eyes, he seems like the same Harry we all know and love from the series. The actual scene was touching as well, how Harry and Dudley awkwardly caught up with each other and the tentatively decided to stay in tough. It was wonderful.

The only think I picked up on was that at the beginning, Dudley said that Harry Potter was 'a four letter word whispered behind...' so you might want to go back and change that.

This was a wonderful oneshot and I really enjoyed rafing it. Great job! :D

Author's Response: Thank you! Dudley's definitely a bit of a question mark at the end of the series, there is so much room to explore with him. This was really an experiment in characterisation and I'm so, so pleased it turned out all right! It's always tricky to take a stubborn character and successfully transform them. So you've made me really, really happy and I thank you for the delightful review.

The one thing you picked up on should be all right. Saying something is a "four letter word" is a common way of saying something is a dirty word or a cuss (so many swear words are four letters). Reading back over it I think it sounds the way I meant it, but I appreciate the note. =)

Thanks again for this really wonderful review! =)


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