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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :) I'm here for Day 2 of the 12 Days of Reviewing Challenge, but also because I really enjoyed beta-ing your story and wanted to leave you some non-grammar related comments! :D

I really enjoyed reading this, I think you wrote Tonks just beautifully. She has this amazing sassiness with her parents which just makes me giggle and it's clear how absolutely loved she is. I sort of imagine Andromeda as being a little colder because of her upbringing and not wanting to raise her daughter that way by being extra attentive.

Tonks just made me laugh so much with her jokes. I felt a little bad for poor Robbie, just because he had a toadlike face, but it was a funny if accidental joke. :P And she was so playful and delightful, with carefully picking which cookie she wanted, and holding the Santa story over her parents, and asking for things to do mischief with from her parents without actually specifying what - it really reminds me of being a kid. :)

Ted and Andy were adorable as well. Ted was amazing, and I could really tell what a wonderful Dad he was. The moment the parents have together where they think about Hogwarts was great too and I could feel how it was a little loaded since that must have been a time of choice for Andy to leave her family behind. I thought the mention of the sisters was perfect as well and thinking about that breaks my heart for Andy a little. It's so interesting how Tonks didn't even know her aunts' names, and has this darker undercurrent to the happy family. Another moment I really liked was at the beginning where Andy said how her daughter was "only ten," as if she's afraid of her daughter growing up too fast. It was a wonderful moment and I think you characterized Andromeda beautifully, like all of the characters really.

I don't know how I can express how much I loved Tonks, she was just so spunky and lovely and I wish I had time to re-quote and restate every thing she did and all her little asides, like when she said she wasn't going to fall for being a princess within the narration. You really took her character and turned her into this lovely child whom I felt like I knew.

Lovely job my dear! :)

Author's Response: Hi! I just wanted to thank you again for beta-ing this for me. You were so incredibly quick at it and really helpful too, so thank you!!

I agree with what you said about Andromeda. She was originally quite cold, but then I thought that she wouldn't want to be like her parents. I don't know if I achieved that, but that's where I was going.

I was hoping that people would connect to Tonks as a child. I wanted some nostalgic feelings for Christmas back when you were a child.

I love Ted and Andromeda. I just think they're an absolutely beautiful couple and I always thought they'd be wonderful parents to Tonks. I can't imagine she would grow up the way she did without them. I also wanted to show the darker side of Andy- I felt like her history was something that I just couldn't avoid.

I'm glad you liked Tonks, and everything else. I was so unsure about this story, but your beta-ing and this review has made me feel more confident about it.

I can't express properly how much this means to me.

x Ely


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