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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Oh goodness. *wipes sweat from brow* This was certainly a busy chapter!

Wow, they found Acanthus! They did! I mean, I was overly paranoid about the map thing, so I didn't think they'd find them, or if they did it would be an awful rotten place, so the fact that they actually found it and it was beautiful was a huge surprise to me. :P It goes to show plot twists don't have to be not foreshadowed at all.

But what were those dots in the distance? Were those just a 'creation of the heat-oppressed brain'? Or were they something from Acanthus?

I loved how you described each of their camel-riding styles - how Charlotte was sedentary and Edward trotted, it just made me laugh haha. :P

Ah wow, no the POVs in this chapter weren't too much at all, the transitions between them all are very smooth and the whole ting flows really well, and I think that each POV gives us a good look at what we need to know but no more.

Hermione here was just lovely as always. You do such a fantastic job with writing the canon characters we all love as older versions of their Hogwarts selves. I loved that little remark Ron said to Hermione about her feats of logic. I love how worried she was and how scatterbrained, and how she care so much for both her children. Hugo was great here as well, sassy and sarcastic with an attitude, and he was great. I really love how he said he was working in the science field, it's just another brilliant way to remind us how close the Wizarding and Muggle worlds actually are. And how Hermione was intent on hugging him was so cute. :)

Ah, I'm still worried. I don't know, I think something's about to happen is this still part of the creepy guys with power's plan? Make sure that Scorpius and Dalila and Rashidi all go back in time where they're easy to pick off? Gah, I don't know, you're so good at amping up the suspense!

Just one thing at the end I picked up was that the photo was dated in 1921, but Howard Carter found the tomb of Tutankhamun in 1922, and the 1920s crew (sorry, that's my collective noun for them now :P) kept complaining that Carter had beaten them to it.

This was an amazing chapter Kiana! You're an amazing writer. :D

Author's Response: Yes, they found it! After all this time, they always would :P (sorry for the bad Snape/Dumbledore reference!) Yes, in my head it would always have been beautiful, obviously there will be some wreckage from when the Romans came and destroyed but overall it's fine.

The black dots were just the others who rode ahead, maybe I need to go back and make it clearer because I don't want everyone to get paranoid over them :P Yay for the different camel riding styles though!

I'm glad that all the POVs were fine, and that they worked to the benefit of the story and not against it. I tend to just have one POV thoughout the whole story so this is a new experience for me to have so many.

I'm so glad that you liked Hermione as she is quite the babe (never thought I would say that really!). Haha, Ron just loves taking jibes at her, I think it's because that they're now married she's less likely to get angry at him for it. Hugo was the stroppy one of the group of course, I imagine him to be a bit of a primadonna if I'm honest :P I'm glad that you liked the mix of magic and science because imagine what they could do if the two combined!

Yes, there is something big happening, but I can't say whether they all go back or if any for that matter! Yay for the suspense working though :P

Ooh, thank you for pointing that out! I've always been terrible with my dates, probably because they're associated with maths! The collective noun for them is fine, a lot better than listing all their names!

Thanks for another amazing review, Emily, I know I say this every time but I truly do appreciate them!

-Kiana


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