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Review:ReeBee says:
Hi there! How long did this review take?? That was rhetorical ;) anyway, sorry for the huge period of time between your request and this review!

Anyway, honestly, there isn't me to improve on! It was good! Amazing really! For someone who likes filler chapters (me!) it was perfect! And don't worry about the length! It was fine!

Ellie's characterisation- amazing as usual!! :D I love her- dry and witty! Awesome! The description also was amazing! While u are saying that you're not happy with these. Here I am going, 'wow! This just gets better and better!' Seriously! It's amazing!

My main thing I loved was the flow! It was perfect! Like seriously, amazing control of it! One thing I would recommend is cutting down the description at the beginning- it became a bit boring to read. I enjoyed it- but it felt like it got a bit draggy.

Another thing I would recommend is using line breaks between periods of time. For example, when u changed from breakfast to Herbology, use a line break or even just a '~' or a '**'.

But, other than that, I loved this! Awesome job! :D

Feel free to rerequest when the next chapter comes out :) I love reviewing this story :) great job, as always!


Author's Response: I have been rather... persistent with my review requests, so it's totally understandable that you took your time!

I also am quite fond of filler chapters as a reader, but as a writer, I always worry about them until they become sandwiched between two plot-heavy chapters. I guess the only way to fix that is to actually write the next chapter though...

Thanks for the feedback on the description! It's an area in which I always struggle, so I look forward to seeing what people have to say about it.

Thanks also for the feedback about the beginning. I've always been a dialogue-heavy writer, and then I go and decide to write this beginning with no dialogue and focus on my weak suit. Thanks for the tip!

Line breaks... must be added, I completely agree!

Thanks so much for this wonderful review!

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