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Review:smitlikesllamas says:
Hey! Sorry about the wait for this! It's been a busy couple of days, you know.

Anyway, this was interesting. I've never really read anything quite like it before. There wasn't as much humor as there usually is in a Hogwarts-Marauders Era fic, but I think that the seriousness kind of fit the story a little bit better. I think humor would have been lost a little bit.

There were a few parts that were kind of difficult for me to understand. Were they on a mountain? They weren't dating yet, were they? If they were on a mountain... what mountain and how did they manage to leave Hogwarts grounds? There were just a couple of random things that I think you could have described a little better to help the reader understand what was going on.

That being said, I really liked James in this fic. He was cute, and honest and I thought he was kind of precious.

I liked what Lily said about not wanting him to change for her, but for himself. I can relate quite well to that quote. I have a friend who has some personal problems, and I thought I was crazy for not wanting him to change for me, so I'm glad at least a fictional character agrees with me. :P

Anyway, I really liked this! Thanks for requesting. Hope you see you around the forums sometime. :)

~Smit

Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time to offer reviews! It's great to receive multiple perspectives on a story, and yours were quite helpful. :D

Haha, I think you need to read more Marauders stories! My favourites have long been the darker, more interesting ones that emphasize the characters' struggles in a period of war. There was a time when I thought of making this story lighter and more humourous, but every time I try to do that, it never works, and I'm glad to hear that the serious nature of this story suited it best.

I have added a line regarding the setting so that it's clearer that they are in the mountains/hills surrounding Hogwarts. In the story already was a line about Lily receiving permission from the professors to go stargazing, and they technically are still on the Hogwarts grounds, just in a different place from where Harry tended to go. From the fact that they call each other by their last names, I intended to imply that they weren't yet dating - it is only after this moment that they begin doing so. I don't like making those kind of things too obvious, rather letting the reader do some work and piece it together from the clues left in the story. But I do agree that the setting needed to be made clearer, and I've changed that. :)

Aw, you know, it's excellent to hear that this story has a personal connection for you, that this kind of situation James is in can actually happen. Lily may like the change that James undergoes, but she wants it to be for the right reasons - she does care about him, in her own way, and that's how she shows it at this stage in their relationship.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! I'm very glad for your feedback!


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