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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Aditi, here for the review exchange! I just wanted to say how easy it was to slip back into this story even though it’s been several months since I last read it which as a nice surprise.

I really loved the family moment between Victoire, Fleur and Dominique at the beginning of the chapter because they were just so adorable with one another and you wrote the family relationship really well. The way they slipped in a few French phrases now and then added authenticity to it as it showed how calm they were to be able to speak another language.

I thought you handled Dom’s decision really well, and you could really sense the pain it was causing her to go through with this. Then the moment was made even worse with remembering that Victoire would have that happy family life one day, and I thought that was a really great touch in showing how sorry Dom’s state was. The final scene of that section with Bill was great, as it all showed how much they cared for her.

It was nice to see a bit of tension between Dom and Teddy given the situation as it added a more realistic feel to it. Then when they resolved it was so cute as you could really tell how much Teddy loved her with the way he was willing to forgo children to be with her. It will be interesting to see if this view will remain or change later on.

So this could have been an organised attack on Dom then? I liked the twist at the end with the letter as it sounds as if you’re introducing another character into the mix which should be interesting. I do wonder whether it was an organised one now, and why on earth did they do it.

A few tiny things such as here ‘“Yes you’re my dear, you surely are’ it would sound better as you are than you’re as she’s agreeing with the previous statement and that would make it clearer. There were a few other cases like that, but another quick read through will omit that.

Great chapter Aditi!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. I am so awfully sorry for this super late response but RL has been keeping me busy.

I am pleased it was easy for you to slip back into the story despite a detachment.

The family moment was slightly difficult for me to write as I am not very good at such scenes so it's a relief to know that you think I did it well there.

Dom's decision was one that had to be taken. I am glad you found it well handled though. Dom's state is awful right now and though I haven't been able to include much of family so far, I wanted to show that everyone does care for her and is there for her be it Bill, Fleur, Victoire or Teddy.

I felt it would have been unrealistic for Dom/Teddy to go through this completely smoothly but at the same time Teddy is not going to let Dom go so easily either. As for their view, we'll see how things go later on =)

It was an organised attack, as is hinted by the letter and as it comes out to be in the coming chapters. As to who did it and why, the answers are all there in the further chapters =)

Thanks for that little tip. I'll fix the grammar issues when I go back to edit.

Thank you for the review!


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