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Review:MissesWeasley123 says:
Hi Dan! I hope you're having a great day with your family!

I really loved the way you began this piece. Again, your descriptions are always so flawless, and you set the dark feeling just so well. I think you're amazing at writing such pieces and scenes, and then it's great to see you going into some light and fluffy stuff like your Harry/Ginny one shot. You're very versatile if I haven't said that before, and it's a great thing to be as a writer. Not only can you write different things, but you're so good at all of them as well.

Greyback is creepy as hell. He is twisted and I had goosebumps when he was talking to Albus. This was chilling:

Greyback chuckled, looking almost wistful. "We know each other alright. If he saw you standing this close to me, he'd probably have a stroke." Greyback turned to follow the Hit Wizards toward the defendant's table. Without looking back, he growled, "Let him know I said hi."

I think there his character really shined through. He is so twisted in the head, especially after all these years. We know he's really strange, especially with his werewolf maniac of infecting everyone but that line... it made me worry a lot. It gave me that feeling that maybe... maybe Hermione won't win this battle.

The Memory Chamber idea was very cool, and really well put. Usually people tend to throw things in to avoid any plot holes, but you really justified why this existed, and I didn't think not once that you had created it. It was very proper, and I loved it.

And also the memory was brilliant! Again your descriptions are always so vivid and so amazing.

Hemrione's great as always. She's so strong and such a great person too. My heart really went out for both her and Seamus when they were talking. You would expect her to hate Lavender, but she didn't and I found that really admirable because women are so weird and not very nice sometimes to other women that threaten their relationships haha.

There was nothing more that I loved in this short story, than the ending. Such perfection. I gasped when I saw her name, and her birth date and then her death date. For me, that was the final blow. But you treated it with such care and ended it at the perfect note. That Seamus was going to try to get better. That meant a lot.

Great story Dan. Absolutely brilliant. Merry Christmas!

Author's Response: Hi, Nadia!

Thank you for all of the kind words. I felt like this scene needed a very dark setup, given the gravity of the situation and what was about to happen. I'm glad that Greyback was giving off a creepy vibe. That's exactly what I was after. Smooth on the surface, but menacing and scary underneath. I didn't see any way that he could resist the urge to rub his impending release in Harry's face.

Whew. A few reviewers have felt like the Memory Chamber was a bit of a stretch, but I think it would have been such a valuable tool for the Wizengamot.

The meeting with Seamus was the plot twist that the whole story was built around. After I read a certain relatively famous fic about Hogwarts under Snape and the Carrows that I'm not allowed to name, I developed quite an attachment to the Seamus/Lavender ship. At the same time, there is an interview where JKR says that she died from injuries suffered during the battle. It seemed so sad to me. I had to give this a try.

I'm so glad that you liked this! Thanks so much and Happy New Year to you!


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