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Review:AussieLottie says:
Great chapter! I've been reading this whenever I can find a minute! :D

Only a few tiny things, check your formality and mature language, the trial scene was, in my opinion a tad too informal and didn't flow right... For example, when Aberforth said, "There were help to get for those who wanted to get out..." I think it would have sounded better as something clearer like: "There was help for those who wanted to get out..."

Also, Ginny Weasley was reserve seeker for the Quidditch team, so wouldn't she go for the position if there were two terrible third years? :P

It's just tiny things (I'm a tough customer :P). Otherwise I'm really enjoying this story! You write really well and I'm so glad I stumbled across this story! I'm going to finish up this review and move onto the next chapter!

~AussieLottie (10/10)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm thrilled to hear that :D

I definitely see your point about the language. English isn't my first language so I do tend to make mistake, however it would probably be a good thing for me to go back and check for mistakes that I didn't see back when I wrote it but that I may have learned by now. Thank you so much for telling me about it, I appreciate it so much!!

Ginny played Chaser at Hogwarts, but she was reserve Seeker when Harry couldn't play in one match. However, she was always better at being Chaser, and that's the role she had in the Holyehead Harpies during her career later on :) So I think she would have been Chaser in her last year at Hogwarts, but I do see your point. Maybe if Dean hadn't shown up, she would have switched positions?

Don't worry, I appreciate feedback so much, and you're really helping me in making the story better, so I really can't thank you enough :) thank you also for reading this story, I hope you will continue to enjoy it :)

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