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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
Why is it that you have entirely too many interesting looking stories when I still haven't made it completely through this one? :p Ah, well, I'll have to get to those later. I'm here from Review Tag, by the way.

This line, "But all of this, of the essence of Penelope will be forgotten in favor of her young beauty, the pretty, immortal corpse she left, forever frozen at nineteen. She is beautiful, but nothing else" definitely struck some emotions. I think it highlighted the mood of the scene, while Verity sat with Mrs. Clearwater with merely the memory of Penelope surrounding them. Furthermore, Mrs. Clearwater's inquiries on why the main motivations of Aaron's death (as well as the other connected deaths) were being withheld from the public emphasized just how
clandestine the impending war was. Also, Mrs. Clearwater's grief in combination with Verity's was very realistic.

I have to say, I really enjoyed Gemma and Verity's conversation. You not only did a fantastic job at portraying interactions between friends, but you also addressed the issues concerning Sebastian. I don't exactly think that Verity and Sebastian make a good pair :).

Ah, I see. So, since Penelope had basically began the relationship between Verity and Sebastian, is there a lingering connection to Penelope that will stop Verity from leaving him if she ultimately decides that they aren't fit for one another? Hm. Penelope and Percy sound like a lovely couple; I wonder how he fairs through all of this?

Bess' back story and all of the historical content was quite haunting (and very interesting), eluding more to the story's tone. Everything seemed to lighten slightly at George's arrival, however :).

Ah, George. He's just so...George. O.o I think I'm trying to say that you did a brilliant job at his characterization, is all.

Gah, this was such a lovely chapter! The last line left this ominous feel to the end...ooh, I wonder what will happen next!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hi again! :)

Ah, well I'm glad you think I have lots of interesting stories! I'm actually really happy you've stuck to review this one as it doesn't have a great deal of recent feedback and these reviews help me think about getting the next chapter written at some point!

I'm pleased you liked that line and how Penelope's memory seems to Verity and her mother. Yes, even though Verity doesn't really know it yet the war is coming and Penny's death is only the beginning. I'm glad you thought it was realistic!

Wow, thank you! :) I'm glad you liked the scene with Gemma, it was one of the first bits I wrote. Yeah, Sebastian isn't such a bad guy, but there is definitely someone better for Ver out there. :P That's a good point about Penelope setting them up - I can't say for sure but Sebastian does represent a large part of Verity's history and connection to Penelope since they were all friends.

Percy shows up in Chapter 5 (if I ever get it posted! :)) His side of the story is far from over.

I'm so pleased you found it haunting and interesting! I based the story on a ghost story I heard and thought it would make a spooky and sad addition to the tone which is rather gloomy at times. And yes, George is a little ray of sunshine in the relatively dreary world of Knockturn!

Thank you, I find George really particular to write so hearing I wrote him well is the loveliest compliment!

Thanks for a wonderful review, and hope to see you back soon! :D


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