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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello! Sorry for the delay with this, I've just been super busy! D:

This chapter was great. It set the scene and gave us so much more detail about the characters and how Amelia is as a person. I really enjoy her character so far.

The only thing I'm confused about is the law school part. Is this a Wizarding law school or just a normal Muggle one where she will then transfer the knowledge and apply it in Wizarding situations?

I do have one teeny, tiny bit of criticism however. I just felt like the commentators' dialogue felt far too forced and the constant 'ho ho ho' and other 'oh ho's', 'ooh' reminded me of Santa (although that's probably because Christmas is tomorrow so...) but what I find helpful is saying the dialogue out loud to see if that's the way you would talk?

You're strong point is definitely description. All the descriptions in this are great and they really give the readers a clear image!

I also enjoyed (well, not enjoyed... but appreciated maybe?) the parts where the commentators were talking about Muggle 'filth'. It's absolutely disgusting and terrible, but it is probably accurate, sadly.

I also loved the banter between Fabian and Amelia. It was very witty and flirty, and who's going to complain about that? ;)

Anyway, this was another great chapter! I'll be back tomorrow (technically later today as it's 1.40 in the morning) to try and review more chapters!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Her law school's supposed to be a Wizarding one 'cuz we figured that Wizarding Britain would have such different laws and court systems they'd need a separate entity to teach their lawyers and judges. That's what's interesting to me in the series, is that you know to be a professor, or an Auror, or a judge, the characters must have needed extra school to learn how to do those careers, but they aren't really mentioned by Harry or his friends.
Yeah, our commentator was meant to be a little ridiculous, kind of a parody of those really macho-cool-guys working in sports industries. But if he's not coming across that way, we should probs rewrite it.
I'm glad you liked the banter, it was fun to write :)

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