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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
I am here from Review Tag!

Holy freaking whoa.

Actually, before we get to that, I'll start at the beginning to prevent a sloppy review. I'm awestruck (and slightly jealous) of how captivating your writing is! The descriptors are lovely as well as the flow. I mean, I didn't expect a scene revolving around Ginny running into Harry's arms to be so positively interesting but it was. Between Astoria's thoughts and the way you wrote the character actions, I found myself reading through the entire section without taking a single note for a review. Of course, then I had to go back and try to deduce exactly why that was :D.

Evidently Ron still carries some feelings of contempt for Draco from his Hogwarts years. This I understand, but as an Auror he needs to acquire some sense of maturity. I mean, honestly, attack Draco Malfoy for (really) no reason, probably wasn't a fantastic decision on his end. Just because he assisted Harry in defeating Voldemort does not give him the right to abuse his Auror-obtained authority. Right, I'll stop lecturing your character now.

The resulting duel was extremely fun to read. I adore action, and this is where things begin to speed up! I think it was the word choice that really made the pace seem ultra-action-y to me (it was fabulous)! Draco's unintentional outburst (I would call it a slip-of-the-tongue but it seemed a bit more intense than that) probably did nothing to assist how people view him.

At least Astoria is attempting to place Draco in a positive light, despite what he said. Technically, Ron DID start it and agitated Draco to the point of saying it...but he shouldn't have said it. Obviously, I have no idea who I'm trying to defend here.

Okay, now back to Holy freaking whoa! What happened to Astoria! This is where I freaked out for a good sixty seconds or so until I realized that there are many more chapters and she probably isn't dead. Still! This chapter was extremely intense and action-y! Loved it!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hello, again!

Thank you so much for the compliments. It feels really good to know that they story was able to capture your attention and imagination. I hope I'm able to keep it up!

Yeah, Ron's still pretty angry about the six years worth of mockery and abuse he suffered from Draco, plus the whole "your mad aunt tried to kill my girlfriend and sister" thing. He does need to grow up, which is where Hermione's lecture was heading before Draco messed up **really** bad. I'm glad you enjoyed the duel. I enjoy writing them a great deal, and I was hoping that Draco didn't seem overly powerful and talented. He learned a few things during the war, but he's no match for even an Auror trainee.

I don't know that Astoria is trying to put Draco in any sort of light as much as she's just trying to figure him out. Remember that she saw nearly the entire altercation. She saw Draco bite his tongue for a very long time before he finally found back, yet he loses his cool when Hermione tries to help him. His behavior is very confusing to her, so much so that she simply can't stop observing him. Then, when he confronts the angry wizards on High Street, she's simply trying to keep him from getting killed.

Nope, Draco and Astoria aren't dead, but they have left Hogsmeade. Where have they gone? Find out in the next chapter! ;)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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