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Review:MidnightBlue_x says:
Okay, third and final review time. Of course, feel free to re-request more reviews, if you would like to.

I had a feeling that this chapter would revolve around Harry, or at least I was hoping it would. After the mentions he got in the last few chapters, I was really interested to see what he'd been up to. I like how Harry wasn't just throwing his life away because of the battle, but because he was scared. The fact that he still sees and feels Voldemort would have been terrifying to him, especially after everyone he lost. As much as I disliked it, I could see why he was acting the way he was. I think the fact that he's still tortured by all of it is incredibly realistic- sometimes I feel like people don't express the pain he would have felt, so I'm very glad that you did.

It was really interesting to see this side of Harry. I think he's darker here that almost any other time we saw him in the books. I think you handled it very well. Again, I still think there are maybe parts you could any more description too. Especially the part where he thought he saw Ginny- with a bit more description you could really show the panic that Harry would be feeling. I think that would make this chapter better and would help the reader understand a bit more. Of course, that's just my opinion.

I hope these reviews helped you in some way and please feel free to re-request!

x Ely

Author's Response: I've said it before, but thank you for the reviews! Feedback is so nice to get! Harry is difficult for me... It took me a long time to write this chapter, but it could definitely use an over-haul. I've always been surprised that Harry never really hit a breaking point after all he's been through... I guess this is his breaking point.

Thanks for the suggestion about the dream/hallucination thing. I'll take that into consideration when I eventually get around to going through an editing process.

I'll be bugging you for more reviews soon:)
Thank you, once again!


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