Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:MidnightBlue_x says:
Okay, final review for this request. If you'd like to review for the next chapter then please feel free, of course you can wait until you have more chapters or you can request for just the one.

I feel like I sort of got carried away with my last review and that I didn't really address your concerns, so I'm going to try and focus on those in this review.

Firstly, the characters. I think it's safe to assume that you realise how much I really do like your characters. Stephane and Marigold in particular, but I also really like the more minor characters. I like how even the smallest of characters get named- I think that really gives it this genuine medieval sort of feel in which everyone in the small town would know everyone else.

Secondly, the plot and the ideas. I like the plot. I like how you've based it off an old tale but you've given it your own little twist to it. This way the readers sort of know what to expect but you're still able to surprise them with how you describe the events and whatnot. I think each section of the chapter flows really nicely into each other- one section can be talking about something and the next about something completely different but they don't seem forced or awkward, they just mould into one another. I still love the story of the Muggles attempting to go against the wizards. I know the ideas are the same as the witch trials, but I still like how you've managed to write it.

Finally, I don't think that it is possible to tell that the chapters have been written with a lot of time in between. I really think, like the subject of each of the chapters alone, that they really flow into one another nicely. All in all, I still think you've got a wonderfully written story here that you should be incredibly proud of.

I hope these reviews helped in some way and wish you all the best luck with the future. Merry Christmas!

x Ely

Author's Response: Hi again! :)

I don't think you got carried away- I loved your last review and this one as well! :D

It's so wonderful to hear you like my characters, really it's such high praise to get. It's really nice to know that you thought it emulated that small town feel. I wanted to include all these minor characters as it's not just the story of Stephane and Marigold, but also of the fate of the other townspeople as well.

Good, it's really helpful to know you liked the plot as well. Working it around the story of the Pied Piper was both challenging but simple in a way since the basic outline is already there. I'm glad to hear that the flow was alright, and that even though they jump around a little it isn't too confusing, as I was quite worried about that. I'm glad you liked the idea of the muggles rising, it was definitely based on the witch trials and quite fun, though also sad, to kill so many characters in these horrid and sad ways.

Ah I'm so glad to hear that they don't sound too dis-connected! I really appreciate you reading the chapters in such close proximity and being able to give me that perspective, it's very helpful. Thank you- I am very proud of it! :D

Thank you for these lovely reviews, Ely! :) I really appreciate your thoughts and all the praise really means the world to me! Merry Christmas to you too! :D


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 930
Submit Report: