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Review:Secret Santa says:
Hello my Secret Santa, here is my gift to you...ONE AWESOME REVIEW! (you have to sing this first line to the tune of the 'Twelve Days of Christmas' to get the full effect ;)

I was so excited to get your name, if you can find out why you'll win a prize! Here's my review for your amazing chapters. Merry Christmas, LilyLou! Here's wishing you the best!

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First off, I'm thrilled that you're exploring a new character and one as interesting as Walburga Black. I like seeing a different side to her that I normally wouldn't expect. The most I know of her is from Harry's stay at Grimmauld Place and the side we saw there was far from pleasant. Perhaps in this story we find out what changed her?

I love that you mentioned a little bit about how the pure bloods dressed. They're so prejudiced against muggles yet they're several years behind them in fashion. This always stuck out to me as odd while I was reading the books so I'm glad someone else mentioned it!

I am curious about how she knows so much about muggles and Christmas? Is it just from the books she secretly reads? I want to know more about her and her 'secret life'.

'The castle has eyes'...Dun dun dun...such a Slytherin thing to say. Don't you think? Great ending :)

All in all, really well done. You developed your character quite nicely and your writing style was consistent throughout your first two chapters. You did a lot of great foreshadowing and gave just enough information to draw the reader in. The only cc I have is minor. At times, I'd like to see more description of her surroundings and those around her. We have access to her thoughts but we sometimes lack her vision.

I'd favorite this but I'd give myself away ;) Can't wait to read more!!

xoxo,

your Secret Santa

P.S. I'm SO sorry this is late! More gifts are on the way :)

Author's Response: Hello, Secret Santa!

Ahh, you were excited to get my name?! I feel so touched. I'm gonna do some snooping around after I write a response to this...

Thanks for all the lovely compliments! This is my new pride and joy, if you can't tell, so all the lovely positives you pointed out are just wonderful! As for the cc, I think over my Christmas break, which technically starts on Monday, I'm going to edit the first two chapters and send them over to Jenna (Lululuna, my beta) and then post them up when the queue opens back up!

Thanks so much!

Janelle

P.S. It's perfectly alright. I understand! Better late than never!(:


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