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Review:kenpo says:
Hey! Here for your requested review! My review style is a little weird, I write most of it while reading, not after. I hope you don't mind.

Thoughts While Reading:

Oooo, Regulus! Will he be heavily involved in this? I hope so! Ooo, I'm intrigued.
I would love to be fed two minute noodles at birthday parties. Does that make me weird?
I like the description of his teeth. A little weird, but in a good way. Her reaction to him seems natural to her character as I know her so far.
Haha, snarky ghosts. I like it. If he sticks around, will they do a lot of arguing?
I like the back-and-forth between Ellie and Chris.
Typo! Dihydrogen, not dihyrdrogen in "a nice, refreshing drink of dihyrdrogen monoxide"
I'm really really liking Regulus!
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Mrs. P. That's so weird, I'm so used to her being Ginny!
I think straitjacket is either one word, or hyphenated strait-jacket.
I like Ellie's internal freak-out.
Was giving the watch just a Weasley tradition? I thought it was a wizard tradition.

General Thoughts:
Again, I'm gonna say that I think the characters are developing well! They're believable, and that's refreshing. You're showing multiple relationships, and they all seem really interesting. You have a lot that's implied but not really said, which I think makes the story stronger.
The whole sequence of Ginny giving Ellie the watch was really insightful into not only Ellie as a person, but how her gift effects her life. I enjoyed her interactions with her brother. I'm fairly certain that her and Albus' relationship will not be static throughout the novel. I do hope that we see more of her father, and her and Chris interacting with him!
My one major critique would be that Ginny sort of seems like a generic mother, and not really like a character.

Overall, very good!

Author's Response: Haha, don't worry about the way you write reviews! I like writing running reviews myself, and then summing things up at the end!

Regulus is a supporting character, yes. He's too much fun just for one appearance. Two minute noodles are the best thing in the entire world. I hope to develop Ellie and Chris' relationship further. They're close, but because there's secrets between them, it makes for an interesting dynamic. Thanks for pointing out that typo, as well as the tip on straitjacket.

I'm glad that you think character development is on track. It's something that really annoys me when it's not done properly. The relationships can be a challenge to juggle, so fingers crossed on that front! Thanks for the feedback on Ginny. I'll see what I can do!

Thanks so much for the feedback!


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