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Review:kenpo says:
Hey, here's your review! I'm going to leave a more detailed review on the second Chapter.

Overall, I really liked this. You managed to have an informal writing style without it seeming really... what's the word I'm looking for? I don't know... it seems very carefully written to read like it was just words flying off the page. I mean that as a good thing.
The concept is really interesting. I've never thought that there might be more than one type of ghost.
I like your characters. They're flawed and that makes them more real. I think their Dad makes me sad. It doesn't seem like he's a bad father, just a broken person.

I think this was a good first chapter. Even if I didn't promise you a review on chapter 2, I'd be reading it.

Author's Response: Oh, it's so lovely of you to leave a review on the first chapter, especially because you really didn't have to. I really appreciate you doing that, as well as your thoughts and feedback.

It's difficult to write casual prose without it coming off as sounding like I wrote the first thing that popped into my head. I think there's a fine line between good and bad casual prose. I'm glad that you thought it was done well!

You're spot on about their dad - he's not a bad father, he's just grieving over his late wife.

Thanks so much for the review, once again!

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