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Review:Reader #1 says:
Well, that was a real mix of stuff. Starting with the rating - a handful of kisses do not a Mature story make! This was probably safe at 12+. There were numerous continuity problems, the most glaring of which was that Fenrir was killed in the cave, then was alive again at Hogwarts. Plot holes galore and time skips without explanation made the last couple of chapters very hard to follow with any sense of logic. Your grammar and punctuation were actually not bad at all. A good beta reader would help you get your plot into better shape. I read the whole thing, but my interested waned at the end as the errors in plot continuity began to pile up. Good effort, but story-telling needs some work.

Author's Response: Yeah I had no control over the rating on this story, the site editors did, and I did argue with them over the Mature ratings they made me put on, but oh well! That's a good catch on the Fenrir thing; I'll go back and edit him out of the Hogwarts scene! I did skip ahead especially for the last chapter, but only because this story had to be wrapped up and no way was I going to attempt to rewrite the 7th book...plot holes are definitely bound to happen in the majority of these fanfics:) Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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