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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi swinging by from review tag!

I really adored this flashback as it contained so many what ifs? I almost went crazy from the speculation of it all. Regulusís narration from that age was really perfect and spot on. Every bit of it from his dialogue to description fitted in with him being a young boy. One thing which really showed that was how he idolised Sirius and Uncle Alphard in a way by calling them his favourites which carried on later on with Bellatrix and Voldemort.

The way he wanted to see revenge on Bellatrix perhaps shows that he could have broken away from that side of the family if he wished too, and again, that was shown through his favourite people are. This spilt time frame made him even more tragic because we know what later happens to him and we can see how he could have changed we just canít do anything about it to prevent the change from occurring.

One small bit of CC if you donít mind. When you look at the chapter, especially at the start of each paragraph it seems to be Regulus, like his name is springing out everywhere. So perhaps if you changed that up a bit it would be good.

The small bit of hope and child like ways were shown with his encounter with Kreacher. I really liked that as it was so touching and heart-warming. It really showed the deep bond those two had. It was interesting to see that scene too, because in a way Regulus is still a child with being left at home by his parents who donít tell him where heís going, but then heís so adult like with the way heís a Death Eater and battling away with everything.

I really enjoyed this chapter as we really got to explore a different and more innocent side to Regulus, also all technical things were flawless so really good work!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey there again!

Okay, somehow you manage to pick up on things that I really need to work on, and I actually think you make me a better writer! Your CC about the paragraphs starting with 'Regulus' has really helped me, because now I look out for that whenever I write! So thank you!

I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter, and I hope to see you back again, even though it took me so long to reply to your amazing reviews!

Courtney:)


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