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Review:Courtney Dark says:

Oooh, this was such a great first chapter, I really enjoyed it!

I've always loved reading Founders stories, but unfortunately I haven't been able to find many on this site. Therefore, I am absolutely delighted that I have stumbled across this one.

I loved the way you introduced this story in this first chapter. Somehow, you managed to give so much information about Helga's backstory and the characteristics of the four Founders, without information dumping and giving me a headache. It was easy to read, and the pacing was great. And I really like the tone that you have set, too.

I love that this is written in first person! I have never read a Founders fic before that way, and it makes me feel so much more connected to Helga as a character.

I already love the relationships that you have built up between the characters, especially between Helga and Godric and Helga and Salazar. I love the whole backstory between Godric and Helga, how they have been friends since childhood, inventing their own spells and whatnot. And I also like the fact that they are both of Muggle birth - will Salazar ever find out, I wonder?

I loved the scene at the end, when Helga turned Salazar into a cat. That's definitely putting him in his place!

This was a great chapter, and I definitely intend to read more!


Author's Response: Hi Courtney! Thanks so much for tagging me :) I'm a Founders lover as well (clearly), so I definitely see where you're coming from. I'm glad you enjoyed this opening!

Haha, this first chapter went through several extensive edits so that it would hit the right notes. It definitely did not start out with the flow it has now! I'm glad to hear that it doesn't feel like an information dump, because that means I did my editing right :)

I love writing in first person! It just helped me feel so much more attached to Helga while I was writing, and I think her voice came through so much more clearly this way. It's great to hear that you felt the same way! If I had done third (which I'm not nearly as comfortable with), this would have felt like a very different story.

The dynamics you've picked up on have been some of my favorites to write. If you read on I hope you continue to enjoy them. And the Muggle-born thing will be an important element, I will say that. But you'll have to read on to find out exactly what role it plays :)

Thanks so much for coming by, Courtney! I really appreciate this sweet review and I hope you keep enjoying the story :)


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