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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello there! This is DarkRose from the forums! I decided to read and review all of the Writer's Duel entries! :D So, let's go over things:

Plot: Wow. This is the first story I've read so far, but this was absolutely lovely. It really blew me away. I loved the theme you chose. It was a really unexpected take on the prompt and really moved me. I felt so bad for Remus. :( You did a great job describing the awkwardness and distance that exists because of Remus's condition. It was really beautiful. Well done.

Characterization: I positively loved your characterization of Remus and his parents. I had never spent much time imagining his home life before he had friends. I liked the moment where readers could feel how overwhelmed he was and he went outside. Really lovely. And when his mom was trying so hard, but it still can't cure him...beautiful.

Descriptions: You did a great job with the details of Remus's transformation, but after that I might have liked more. It would be nice to be able to see, hear, smell, feel, etc. everything else in the story, in order to bring it to life. What you have is really nice though.

Emotions: Wow. I was really sad for Remus. I could feel that awkward tension in his family and was really impressed that that translated so well to the reader. Great job.

Stylistically, this was beautiful. I loved your writing. Great job and good luck in the Duel!

--Emily

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for the review :D

Awh, I'm glad you liked it! I actually started a different piece for this prompt and was about 300 words in before I ditched it and started on this - it was about Molly stitching a Christmas table runner and the different generations of her family adding panels to it. But it was too fluffy and happy for me, because I'm fond of my angst, so this happened instead.

Thanks so much! I'll bear what you said about description in mind - I wrote this in a bit of a rush to make the deadline, so it isn't really as developed as I'd like it to be and I'll probably revisit it sometime soon. Thank you for reviewing! ♥


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