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Review:MargaretLane says:
*laughs at "major assassination duties*

And you know the funny thing? I haven't got as far as the romantic part yet, but so far you've managed to make the idea of students at Hogwarts playing kissing games and the idea of regular dances at Hogwarts seem plausible. I don't read many stories with those things, so can't really say other writers don't, but I generally think they are rather American teen dramaish for Hogwarts and yet they were pretty plausible here.

Yikes, Blaise's comment about wanting them even more when they "play hard to get" is downright creepy. Especially since physically attacking somebody is a lot more than playing "hard to get". It's fairly clear she didn't want him to kiss her.

*laughs at the dance involving imitating a Hippogriff*

And I love the idea of Luna believing in a creature that hides in your breakfast cereal. That's hilarious.

When Luna is telling Draco her blood status, there should be a full stop after "Pureblood." and "she wrinkled her nose", should have a capital "s" on the "she" as that's a separate sentence.

Draco's comment about the grounds of Hogwarts being dangerous for young girls is kinda creepy too. I mean, I suppose they ARE, but saying it like that makes it sound like he's planning to murder her or something, which, you know, isn't entirely impossible. I mean, he wouldn't, since he couldn't even murder Dumbledore and I guess it'd be harder for him to murder somebody in his own class, but since he is a Death Eater at this point, it is definitely possible they could make him do something dodgy.

Again, when Draco says "sort of" and shrugs, there should be a full stop after "sort of" and a capital letter starting the next sentence.

The last part surprised me. I didn't expect the thing to be declared a hallucination. It explains a lot though, particularly Hermione's final summing up of present and future events.

Author's Response: Hello again! Hee, it's the most wildly implausible thing I've ever written (well, thinking about it, probably not) so I'm glad it actually comes off as quite plausible! I'm kinda baffled by the fanfic trope of the school masquerade ball - the highlight of my secondary school experience was pretty much whenever the canteen served chips - but you've gotta love it as a trope for the possibilities it offers for drama.

Yep! Blaise is downright creepy. He scoops the inagural Robin Thicke award for 2013 in this!

Oops! Didn't even realise there were typos - thanks for pointing those out :) I'll edit when I get a chance.

Hee, I didn't feel like there was any other way to end it. Also, I wanted to use that terrible, terrible, 'and he woke up and it was all a dream' trope.

Thanks so much for the review! ♥


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