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Review:MissesWeasley123 says:
Well, obviously I enjoyed this. It was brilliant. It was so different seeing you portray Hermione in this way because all the other times I've read a piece where you include her, she's always with Ron and gives a funny touch to this. One hardly gets to see her portrayed like this in fics, so intent and determined. Brilliantly written.

The beginning was so intense. For a second I was completely into it, though I had no clue who she was talking to, but I believed what she had to say about the Statute and it was amazing. Then when Albus came into view, I completely snapped out of it and was smiling because that whole scene was so well written. Your description is flawless as always.

Hermione's determination was so well shown, and I was right there with her all along. She's such a strong female character and you took the chance and wrote something like this, rather than a typical romance. It was great seeing her interact with Albus, who was also a really strong character. It was concerning when he was sticking up for Greyback, but understandable. I enjoyed him as a Magical Law person (for a lack of a better word, or perhaps laziness to go search what you called it) rather than the next gen cliche Auror or Quidditch player.

The package was really mysterious and so was this piece. You managed to keep that whole dark thing going and it was amazing. What a unique idea!

Brilliant writing, Dan. It's great to see all the variety you can write and are capable of.

Author's Response: Hi, there! What a nice surprise!

I liked the idea of getting Hermione completely away from Ron and Harry for a change and letting her do something on her own. Adding Albus as a protege put her completely in the driver's seat in this story, so that was fun to explore.

For the beginning, I wanted something that would set a mood for the rest of the story, but at the same time give the reader a bit of a head fake. I also wanted to introduce Albus and explain his role. The practice session for her negotiation seemed like a good way to do it and also seemed like the exact sort of thing that she would do to prepare. I'm really glad that it worked for you!

Hermione is pretty ferocious in this, now that I reread it. I'm glad that she comes across as being very strong and capable and in control. I was pretty sick of romantic stories at the time I wrote this, so the only element of romance in the whole thing is... um, it's in chapter 2. Don't want to spoil anything for you, but I promise that it won't change the way you think of Hermione at all.

Albus seemed like such a quiet one in the epilogue. He also seemed to over-think things. That reminded me a bit of his aunt, so I decided to run with it.

I'm incredibly pleased that you found this and enjoyed it! Not many people dig that deep on my author's page any more. I hope chapter 2 lives up to your expectations. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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