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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
Yes! More awesome next gen!

I love everything about this -- Scorpius as this nervous, over thinking, conscience teenager; the descriptions of Hogwrats and the hilarious description of Rose at the start; and the funny dialogue too!

The characterisation of Scorpius was super duper! I loved the first line, "alright lets start with the basics…" and the narrative in the first section introduced him brilliantly. I felt like I'd known Scorpius for most of my life! The way quirky lines and descriptions feel perfectly flowing, and I liked the way that you could tell who each character was by the way they spoke, for example the bluntness of Albus in comparison to Molly's happier busy tone. The way you described Rose as being "stubborn" and "beautiful" next to each other was basically the best sum up of love ever! You showed how Scorpius loves her despite her flaws that annoy him. That showed a lot about both characters right at the start, which was another bit of detail that made me feel like more connected with Scorpius. I found the whole plot thoroughly gripping, and I really enjoyed the bits about Molly proving Scorpius wrong. I also thought it was so cute the way Albus and Rose are closer with each other over their siblings, and the way Molly can over ride Albus' winning smile!!

His whole plan is super original and inventive, and I kind of want it to go wrong for him and get put in an awkward situation, which i know sounds really mean, but i want to see Scorpius tell Rose straight in the face! i honestly don't think that's going to happen though! I'm also kind of hoping that Molly and Scorpius get together…hmm, this story is so captivating! I can't wait to see how it all works out!

Sophie :D

Author's Response: aww thank you, you are so sweet :)

I'm really glad you liked this story cuz I wasn't too sure about it at first! It definitely isn't my best but I guess that's to be expected with writing; you get better with time!

I hope you liked the rest! :)


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