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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Another fantastic chapter! Wow! There are a lot of very interesting things going on that I'd love to comment on, so I'm trying to do a running review to catch as many as possible. This is one of the most creative fanfics I've come across this year, and it's a wonderful treat to have come across it while it's still in progress. ^_^

The atmosphere once again stands out - your descriptions of the Hogwarts grounds in winter are refreshing because, while you capture the beauty of the place, there's also a hint of the Gothic in the skeletal trees and the unnatural smoothness of the lake. There's something off, foreshadowing Ophelia's appearance quite nicely. I'm also still interested in your characterization of Scorpius because, even more so than in the first chapter, he comes across as strange (but still very Malfoy-like - Draco in HBP had some of these same characteristics), which is why I suppose the other kids feel compelled to bully him. You can't blame him for wanting to be outside, especially when he knows that no one else will bother him - here by the lake, he feels safe and better able to complete his work without interruption. The similarities between his appearance and that of Ophelia are also of note - I wonder if anything will come of that. Even if nothing does, I still really like the way that Scorpius blends into the scenery in the first scene - he's part of winter and nature in a way that he can't be with his classmates.

When the girl first came out of the lake, I was struck by the allusion to the Lady of the Lake, Arthurian legend so easily fitting into the Potterverse. At the same time, the use of the name Ophelia is fascinating because, in Hamlet, Ophelia drowns, but in this story, she re-emerges from the water - I love that kind of reversal. She reminds me of a syren with the way that she entices Scorpius to come into the water, attempting to kill him. The way you write her is fantastic! She's so creepy - I can't really explain how she's creepy, but there's a strong sense of "wrongness" about her. This sense enhances the Gothic atmosphere of the story, making it even more fun to read. :D

Another aspect of this story that I like is how this supernatural side of the story is set in contrast to the realism of Scorpius's relationship with his fellow students. The tensions between him and Rose were very well-written. She embodied many of her parents' traits - and not necessarily the best ones - and she came across very strong, even though she only appeared briefly. Your characterizations are brilliant, and I look forward to seeing what you've done with other next generation characters.

I'm definitely going to add this story to my favourites - these first two chapters are of high quality, and the whole idea of this story really appeals to me. It'll be amazing to see where you take it next. :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

I'm happy the atmosphere stands out, because I've always felt that there is a definite air of spookiness to Hogwarts - to all castles, really - and I definitely wanted to play on that!

Woo, you mentioned both the Lady of the Lake and Ophelia from Hamlet! I find that awesome, because I was inspired by both of those stories, and it's cool that someone else picked up on them! And I'm glad that you enjoyed the way I write her!

Oh, it's great that you think Rose embodies some of her parents traits! I wanted to make her her own person, but I also wanted her to be a 'Weasley' at the same time.

Thank you very much for the amazing review!


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