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Review:MidnightBlue_x says:
Hi, this is ElysiumJayne from over at the forums, and I'm here to fulfil your request!

I think one of the best things about Hannah Abbott is that there really isn't much known about her except for her house and that she ends up with Neville. She's basically a blank canvas. Because of that, I don't think you need to worry about her characterisation- you've written her here really well in my opinion. I think the fact that she's sort of scared to get involved after everything she went through is incredibly realistic.

As for Neville, I think you did really well with him as well. I like that you haven't written him as this big war hero but rather as the old Neville, with a little bit more confidence maybe. I like how you mentioned the part of about him not really being Auror material- I thought that admittance was very Neville.

You said you thought you were terrible lovey dovey scences? I'm not sure that I agree with that. I think that you built up the bit of romance/friendship between Hannah and Neville nicely. It didn't feel it was forced, it just flowed really nice and it was realistic! I don't think you're nearly as bad as you seem to think you are!

As for the quote, I know how difficult they can be to fit into stories, but I like how you wrote it in. Having it at the end really highlights the quote. I definitely thought that you fit it in with the themes of the story- again, it didn't seem forced to me.

I hope this review helped you in some way, and I wish you luck with the challenge! I wish you a very merry Christmas and a lovely New Year too!

x Ely

Author's Response: Thank you for responding to my request so quickly! I'm sorry that it's taken a little while for me to respond to your review.

I always get a bit antsy when I get too close to talking about canon characters, so I was really worried about Hannah's characterization, but I see your point! She's mentioned here and there in the books, but she isn't really explored in depth. I'm so glad that you think I've portrayed her realistically!

Yeah, I'm a big fan of old Neville (although Matthew Lewis is absolutely perfect...). He may have destroyed a Horcrux, but at the end of it all, he's still a bit clumsy, a tad clueless, and a truly nice guy. He just isn't the Auror type, and I think that he knows that.

Awww, you're sweet! I always feel like I don't write romance as well as some of the really fabulous authors on HPFF do--when I write it, it seems a bit forced. But I'm glad that you thought it was okay. We are our own worst critics, after all! I guess I'll just have to write more romantic scenes for practice. ;)

Ah, yes. The quote! I had hoped that it didn't seem too much like an afterthought, and I'm glad that to you, it doesn't seem that way.

Your review definitely helped me A LOT. Thank you so much for all of your praise and opinions! Happy New Year!!

~UnluckyStar57


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