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Review:Rumpelstiltskin says:
I've returned (and am here under the guise of Review Tag)!

First of all, I found the imagery very captivating. The sense of dread that Draco felt during his dream came across astoundingly realistic. The dark and damp setting and Draco's terrified emotions only added to the horror.

I'm very happy to see some Astoria's characterization is beginning to be revealed. It is not entirely fair for her father to be judging Draco based on Lucius' actions, but is understandable given Lucious' position during the two Wizarding Wars. The conversation also unveiled Astoria's kindness and ability to see the potential in others.

Draco is also given more depth in this chapter. His drive to change himself is an endearing characteristic. I'm anticipating how Draco and Astoria will cross paths again, and how their relationship with eventually develop.

This was fantastic!

-Rumpel

Author's Response: Hi there! Please feel free to return under any pretense that suits you! :)

I'm really glad that you liked the dream scene. I was struggling to hit a balance between keeping the descriptions very dark and spartan and trying to convey the horrors that Draco sees.

Astoria starts to even out a bit in this chapter. She's not quite so perfect and you get a sense of where she comes from. Her father doesn't understand how dangerous and powerful Voldemort was because he wasn't a Death Eater and he didn't really take sides during the war. Horatio Greengrass really does believe that the war was started by the Blacks, Malfoys and other Death Eater families as a way to seize power by installing a puppet ruler.

Draco really does want to change, but he is still learning just how hard it's going to be. He will definitely cross paths with Astoria again, and soon.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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