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Review:Mrs Ravenclaus says:
As Gifting Time is fast upon us and this chapter is larger than the other two so it can have its own review but this will be my last review for now, but Mrs Ravenclaus will be back for some more festive fun!

Obviously this was written pre-Deathly Hallows but I really loved how you changed their first train ride there. It was interesting to get a glimpse of Narcissa just then and see into the Black family life dynamic because I do love that family. Sirius was already perfecting his surly look which made me laugh a lot. :P Haha, he is brilliant!

I really loved Jamesís relationship with his parents as it was exactly what I imagined it to be with them all being so close and having laughs and joking. They really did seem to love each other and dote on James which explains his cocky behaviour which came out later on with Sirius. I really love how when they walked into that train compartment they probably didnít realise what great friends they were all going.

The rivalry bragging thing going on between James and Sirius made me chuckle. In a way, Sirius was made to think a lot of himself being a Black and a pureblood, then James being a single child so itís almost their natural behaviour when I think about it. I really did feel for Lily though because she must have been dealing with so much with her sister and then Snape, so Iím not surprised she was crying it was just a shame they were there too.

I loved the scene with Remus! You wrote him really well with him naturally wanting to be on his own which was really great. I had so many feels about he, Severus and Lily all being friends as they do have a lot in common being outsiders, smart and liking books. Oh if only that happened! Then there were James and Sirius at the end with their friendship almost being written in the stars. Ah, I love all these characters being here, I already have a sense of them and it seems as if this will be a great story!

Author's Response: Hello again Kiana :) Thank you for another great festive fun review!

I found it really hard to edit this to be canon to Deathly Hallows - mainly as I had really liked the first version of this chapter and also fitting in the scene from Deathly Hallows and sticking to the 3 line rule! I'm glad you liked that it was changed to include the canon details though :)

I could not see James being any other way with his parents, so I'm glad you loved the way I portrayed their relationship :) I felt their doting would explain James's cockiness well, as you said, I'm so glad you agree!

I did feel sorry for Lily in that compartment, she just wanted a quiet train ride and was confronted by two slightly arrogant boys. Poor Lily. But, I agree, that was almost James and Sirius's natural behaviour, they were made to be that way by their parents (in a way). It's good to hear you see it the same way here :)

Yay! I am so pleased you loved the scene with Remus and that you thought I wrote him well :) I worried that people may think he was OOC, but I felt he would have been really worried about people finding out about his lycanthropy and there is a reason he decides to keep himself from making friends which will come out a bit later on in the story ;) I totally agree that they would have made a good group of friends, but it wasn't to be.

It made me so happy to hear that you felt that this will be a great story and that you loved the characters :) thank you so much!!

Thanks again for the fab review :)

Haronione ♥

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