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Review:Secret Santa-Claw says:
Ho ho ho, Secret Santa-claws here with the first of your Ravenclaw Christmas gifts :)

I really enjoyed this opening chapter! I particularly loved your original portrayal of Molly Weasley in this, and that she is the main character. I am used to seeing her as a background character and being portrayed as a bit of a mini Percy, so I was intrigued by the description of her in the very first paragraph - as far from a mini-percy as you could get! I thought it was great that while her appearance is not what you would expect from Percy's daughter, she still has some very Percy-like qualities. For example, her logical thought processes about the move to a floundering team, her academic back ground and exam results etc. I found it awesome that she was neither a (female) clone nor the complete opposite - you have given her a more realistic character here :)

I also like the OC's you've introduced here; Fitz, Max and McCormack seem like interesting characters and I look forward to seeing how they develop as the story continues :) I am particularly interested in Fitz, and the snippets of his back story have me intrigued - is this covered in more detail later in the story, or is it in the Midnight Run trilogy? Either way I am excited to read about his story :)

I've not read a Quidditch based story before, and if I am honest I've not really been drawn to them before. However, this seems a very interesting premise for a story and I am intrigued as to where it leads :D

All-in-all, a great opening chapter that I really enjoyed reading and look forward to reading on!

-Secret Santa-Claw ♥

Author's Response: Hiya and thank you so much for reviewing!

I'm glad you're enjoying the opening salvo - I wrote Molly as a background character a few times in the Rose stories I write, then with a slightly larger role in "Sparks", so it felt time to give her her own story. She's got a lot of Percy's meticulousness, ambition, and feeling of always being right ;) Her aesthetic is more of her uncle Bill's "cool" though, with the leather, dyed hair, mohawk, and postmodern style. She's fun to write.

More about Fitz's backstory will come out throughout the story, yes. This is his first appearance in a story. Same for his buddy Max, and for Meghan McCormack, who is actually a canon character. I love developing OCs, so I'm always happy when readers like them too.

It's both a romance and a sports story. I'm not super experienced with writing sports (or for that matter, with watching them), so I'm hoping that aspect of the plot turns out.

Thanks again for reviewing, and I'm sorry for the delayed response!


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