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Review:MidnightBlue_x says:
Hi, this is ElysiumJayne from the forums here to fill your review request! Let's get started then!

I wasn't quite sure where this chapter was going to go at the beginning, but I really liked how it turned out. I love Pippa- I think she has the potential to be a really great main character. I especially liked how feisty she was- she wasn't going to take any of Peter's actions lying down.

You were concerned about the believability- I think it's quite good, but there are a few parts that I think you could fix up. I think some of the dialogue seems a little bit out of place or forced at times. I think if you changed a couple of words here and there, the whole chapter would flow much better.

As for the plot, I'm interested to see where this is going to go. I'd like to find out what Pippa's occupation is, because it sounds quite interesting. Because it's the prologue, I can't really comment on too much more. I hope this review helped you in some way nonetheless and feel free to re-request when your next chapter is up, if you'd like to.

x Ely

Author's Response: Hi there Ely!

Thank u so much! There's a lot to Peter and Pippa's relationship that isn't revealed yet, so, yeah, she is feisty. I'm more than half way through the next chapter and I find that she can be really cold and cruel, so she's a bit different from what I usually write and i'm enjoying it :)

Yeah- to me, the whole idea of James crashing a wedding just literally came to me in a dream. And well, dreams aren't exactly believable, so... Thanks :) I'll go back and have a good read through :)

Believe me, her occupation isn't that interesting, she just does crazy things in her position. But the whole plot is based on what he does with her profession :)

Thank u so much! I will probably rerequest :)

-ReeBee :)


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