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Review:Mrs Ravenclaus says:
In order to try and read as much as possible before the gifting date, Iíll double up some reviews on this story, if thatís ok! :)

I really liked the split perspectives in this story because it means that weíll get a really full image of the Marauders and how they all grew to meet one another. This works really well because weíre starting from a young age which isnít something I see all that often in Marauders stories, so yay for shaking that up!

Iím also really glad that you chose to start with Lily and Remus because with her being a Muggleborn and Remus a werewolf they, arguably, are going to benefit the most from going to Hogwarts because for once theyíll fit into a school and have nothing to hide from. I also really liked both of their narrations because it reflected this hopefulness of going there in that and that was a really nice touch.

It was really sad to see how Petunia and Lilyís relationship had deteriorated even more in this chapter, almost as if Lily being a witch was the final axe in their coffin and there could be no going back after that. Reflecting on her relationship with her sister and her one with Snape in this chapter was a really good touch because itís often forgotten but before her going to Hogwarts, they were the biggest forces in her life really.

I really loved how Remus and Lily met, it was so cute! They were like kindred spirits really as they both had a reason to fear and look forward to Hogwarts and that was reflected really well for their age. I just wanted that scene extended even more because it was so cute.

A wonderful two chapters and I canít wait to read on!

Author's Response: Hello again :) Off course that is ok... loved the excuse for not reviewing the first chapter, heehee, it did make me a bit suspicious as to who my Secret Santa was, and it turned out I was right in my suspicions (I had no idea who you were until a couple of reviews after this when I started doing some detective work and checked who had already reviewed chapter 1 of this and my Blaise one-shot) Anyway, on with the response :)

I'm really glad you like the split perspectives in this story. It will continue to be told from various perspectives and I hope it continues to work well!

I felt this story had to start with Lily and Remus because they would have had the most unusual(?) start to Hogwarts, so I'm glad that you liked that it started with them. In the original draft of the first chapters (about 6ish drafts ago) it started with James but I decided it needed to start with Lily. It's good to hear that you liked their narrations too, I was hoping it would reflect their hopefulness etc of going to Hogwarts :)

I always thought that the fact that Lily was magical and went off to Hogwarts (something Petunia would never be able to be a part of) was the final nail in their coffin, due to Petunia's reaction to Hogwarts in PS. Their relationship will have it's ups and downs in this story, but ultimately, as you said, there is no going back :( I'm glad you felt Lily's reflections on Petunia and Snape were a good touch though :)

Yay, I'm so glad you loved Lily and Remus's meeting :) I really enjoyed writing that part so it's great to hear you enjoyed reading it and found it cute! There will be more Remus/Lily scenes as the story continues.

Thank you so much for the great review (sorry it has taken so long to respond!!)

Haronione ♥


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