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Review:Secret Santa :) says:
Santa Claus is comin' to town! And I saw that you had a Christmasy-themed story and I knew it would be the perfect one to kick off my reviewing spree. I think you did a great job with it! It made me smile and it had just the right amount of awkward for a mistletoe situation :)

I really like the rapport you gave your Marauders. I've never tried writing them before because I'm so afraid I won't be able to do them justice. So I'm really impressed that you tackled them, and that you did it so well! Sirius and Remus were especially spot-on, I think...I loved their little quips throughout the story. And I think you nailed the mistletoe part! I couldn't stop smiling! And I could just feel poor Sirius' shock and outrage when James kissed him. But hey, James was willing to do whatever it took to get them free. I imagine their friendship would get a lot more comfortable after this incident :)

The one line that hit me wrong was when Lily and Mary were talking about Snape, and you mention that she "doesn't need that kind of negativity in her life." And then just leave it at that. I imagine that Lily would be a little more conflicted about her decision to cut Severus out of her life. Even though it was the best decision for her, I don't think she would be quite so cold when she thinks of him. They were best friends for years, after all. But I really did like your Lily overall. She had some sassy moments that really made me laugh, especially at the end when she teases James :D

This is such a cute oneshot! Good luck in the writer's duel, and in the meantime keep watching for me to drop off another present! Merry ten-days-till-Christmas!

--Your Hufflepuff Secret Santa

Author's Response: Hello Santa ;) Sorry for the late response to these!

I would have thought that as well, but as someone who has just cut out two of her best friends (we'd been friends for ten years - my whole childhood was with them), I can say that they were my thoughts on it and at first it surprised me but Lily is a very strong girl and I think she felt like their friendship was long over, that was just the last straw (again, like what happened to me) so that's why I put that in there. To show how strong Lily truly was. But I can see why you think that it's a bit wrong, but that was my way of thinking for Lily. Of course she'd have days where she'd be sad but I personally think that most days she'd be happy that she cut the toxic out of her life. But maybe that's just my head canon :p

WOW, sorry about that massive thing! I hope I didn't come across as rude!

Anyway, thank you so much for this review, Maggie! Thanks for being my Secret Santa! :D

- Kayla :)


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