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Review:milominderbinder says:
Hi Kiana! I'm here to review this as your challenge entry! Sorry it took me a few days to get around to it :)

This was a great chapter. I haven't read all the beginning chapters of this story so I don't have all the context, but I feel like it stood alone perfectly. It was sweet in places, but also really sad!

I liked Andromeda, though I was a little disappointed that she refused to help Sirius. I would have thought that after rebelling against her family and also now having a child, she would be brave and want to help other people in the family get out of that bad situation as well. Still, I guess I could see why she doesn't act as bravely as she probably would have wanted to, here. I can espeically see why she would have wanted to stay alive for Nymphadora, who is an adorable handful!

I love stories with little kids in them - she was adorable and she added such sweet moments to some of the more serious parts of this, so that was great to read. I loved that her hair was bubblegum coloured even back then!

I think my favourite section was actually this:

'Mummy, mummy I want to get out.'

Andromeda watches her hair change from a bubble-gum pink to a vivid orange and kicks at her chair, knocking the apple on the ground again. She wanders over, moving away the small tray attached to the chair, and before she can move away her daughter jumps out of the chair and runs down the corridor.

'She is a character,' Sirius sighs, grabbing his cup of tea and heaping sugar into it.


^that is SO how I picture a baby Nymphadora! It was an adorable little section, especially as it contrasted Andromeda and Sirius' more serious conversation.

Some other lines I loved were:

It's as if the parts of her, the parts of her she used to be, are sliding further and further from her like the tea cup.

Andromeda doesn't add on that she's not brave enough to confront Bella. She can't. She can't admit to herself that the love for Ted was too great and drove her away from her family, but the fear of her sister is too great to save someone she once loved.

She lets out a laugh which seems to ripple across the air, reminding them of the divide between them and her. Nymphadora will never know the Blacks; she will never visit number twelve Grimmauld Place or number fourteen Plymouth Square. She will never know a single thing about it.

^this bit in particular was sad to me because, as we know, Tonks does go on to know Sirius and to spend a lot of time at Grimmauld Place, and to know Bellatrix as well, but none of it is in a good way and it eventually all leads to her death :( I'm glad Andromeda doesn't ever know that's going to happy at this point, though.

I could definitely see the influences of the quote on the chapter, which was great. You really wove together a moving chapter here with the contrasting sweet parts and sad parts, and even if I didn't have all the context, this was still wonderful to read. Well done!

The challenge results will be up in the next couple of days :)

~Maia

Author's Response: Hi Maia! This review was so lovely I didn't want to reply to as it would go, but it's been sitting here far too long for my liking :P

I'm really glad that you've only read this one in a way because I was a little paranoid that these chapters were all too related to one another so it was nice to get a different perspective on it.

Yes, I was too even though I made her do it, but the vital difference I was trying to show was that she was a Slytherin, still more related to her family than Sirius. Then, also unlike Sirius, she had built a new life which relied on her and couldn't really survive that well without her, so in a way she couldn't be selfless in this case.

I'm so glad that you liked Tonks, because I wrote a novella about adult Tonks, so writing this version of her was a lot of fun :P I thought it would be fun too contrast her and Sirius because in a way they have a lot of similarities sort of going against their families and being the black sheep, but in a way they're so different too.

I know what you mean about being glad Andromeda doesn't know. It's horrible knowing her future and knowing that a small girl is going to have to die one day because it just seems far too cruel to deal with and I really wish that it could have been different.

I'm glad that the quote shone through because it did in my head though I wasn't too sure of how it translated. :P Thanks for such a wonderful challenge, it was a ton of fun!

-Kiana


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