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Review:Secret Santa says:
Hello! This is your Secret Santa with the first of your reviews!
I really liked this chapter! I think the idea of writing this story from multiple points of view is really interesting, and I love that you started with Lily and Petunia's father! We never see him in JKR's writing, so I love that you picked a character you could really make your own and have fun with. He seems very sweet, and I love how much he thinks of his late wife.
I also can't wait to see how things go when Lily, Petunia, James, and Vernon are in a room together! James and Vernon, in particular, since they're so different! I think it's really sweet how Petunia still cares about Lily even if she doesn't show it, and I hope that doesn't change too much once she meets James! I have a feeling that things will not go the way I'm expecting them too, either!
There were two tiny grammar things I noticed- the first one is "I received you last letter" but it should be "your last letter" and the other is "he was more then worried" which should say "more than worried"
I didn't see any other grammar mistakes, and I loved the flow of this first chapter. It's a really nice opener for your story, and I can't wait to keep reading! Great job so far, and happy holidays!
Santa

Author's Response: Aww, Thank you. You're so kind.

Actually, I can't wait to see all of them in a room together myself. I'm working on the next chapter right now, and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing them in the same room. And I hope you (and the other readers) will like it.

And finally, FINALLY someone pointed out my grammar mistakes. You probably know it already, but English is not my native language. I've been learning it for most of life, but I still have a lot of mistakes. And I've been waiting for someone to point them out. So really; Thank you! I'll actually fix them right away.

And I'm really glad you liked the chapter. Hopefully you'll like the future ones as well :)

- Lotte


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