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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is a nice start to your story! I rather liked your depiction of Draco here, though you think that he's OOC. It must depend on how a person imagines Draco would be after the war because I don't see this version of Draco to be out of character - he's still very opinionated, somewhat rude and disdainful, hiding his actual thoughts from those around him. He went through a lot during the war, and that has the potential to change him, bringing out different aspects of his personality and inspiring him to find a new course in life. A strong interest in tea isn't something that comes to mind right away, but I think that your choice to make him distance himself from his old friends and his general manner here is still pretty Draco-ish.

The ending was especially striking because the intrusion of the narrator there was highly effective, carrying readers forward into the next chapter and the introduction of Astoria. It's hard to make that kind of narrative intrusion work, but in this case, it added to the fun, quirkiness of this story. Hearing that Astoria would disagree with Draco suggests that the road to love won't be particularly smooth - it's one of those minor disagreements that can make or break a relationship. I'm interested in knowing more about your Astoria and how Draco will react to her just from that little hint you provided.

It would be nice to see you do more with Pansy, though. Since she's the only one of his old friends that he can tolerate, I assume that she'll make a return, but hopefully you can flesh out her character some more - there seems to be more to her in the way that she grins at Draco at the end, but the nature of her babbling conversation makes me wonder why Draco tolerates her. If he's so annoyed with her, why does he still spend time with her? Is it for old-time's sake? It'd be nice to explore that further, and you could use it to also further Draco's character development.

Good work on this introduction to this story! All the best in continuing to devleop its plot and characters! ^_^

Author's Response: I'm glad that you like my depiction of Draco, I was a little bit worried only because I didn't think that he would become like this after the war. But I do agree that after the war he might've gone down a lot of different routes in his life. I felt like his interest in tea would've been one of the things that he may have developed once he started leading a quiet life away from everyone that he associated with as a teen. I'm glad to hear that you didn't view him as OOC however.

The ending is personally my favourite part of the story. I had the most fun writing it and every time that I go back and look over it I always feel so proud of it. I'm very happy to hear that I pulled it off well and I'm especially excited to introduce Astoria to the story. I imagine her to be a bit of an opposite when it comes to Draco so it definitely won't be smooth sailing with them.

I am definitely going to be going into Pansy more because there is a reason why she's the only one that Draco hangs around her. She's going to have quite a bit of a part in the story.

Thank you so much for your wonderful review, it means a lot to me and I had fun answering it!


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