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Review:ReeBee says:
Kiana!!! I love this ship! Remus/Lily has always been so perfect to me! They just fit! If u get what I mean... So so sweet! :) And even the names- Remus and Lily sound perfect- just like James and Lily!

I don't even know what to say! The writing style was perfect- it was hazy and dreamlike (if u get what I mean) and thats perfect! Which also suits the title! This story is one of the best uses I've read of third person to create atmosphere :)

The only CC was that there were a few typos, but they were tiny and didn't distract from the actual plot :)

One more CC, is also maybe including a bit more of the romantic conversations between Remus and Lily- that would increase the angst when Lily gets together with James- terrible for me, but good for the writing :) Not much, just snippets here and there. :)

I really loved this! And I've never seen Lily portrayed in this light- she's not the most innocent person here and I like it! Its not cliche- where Remus gives up lily because James likes her. I like it how Lily cheats on Remus- a nice twist! Don't get me wrong- I love super innocent Lily, but, its interesting to see her in a different light :)

Loved the story!!! :)

-ReeBee :)

Author's Response: Hi ReeBee! I know what you mean about this ship because I've always had a soft spot for it too. In a way, I almost prefer them to James and Lily because they seem to be on the same wavelength.

I never thought of viewing it as dreamlike, but I get what you mean! I'm glad that you liked the third person, because though Remus is one of my favourite characters to write, I can only ever seem to write him in third person and never first. :P

I'll review it and try and find the typos. As for the romantic conversations, I'm not too sure about that because I'm trying to show how they weren't like that, and how Lily only really did that with James because it was almost a farce with him because she could only ever be herself with Remus and Severus. I'll think about it though and see if I can slip in an extra line or two.

Hahaha, I hate super innocent Lily so don't worry about liking her in this light. I think she must have been a rather twisted person given her relationship with Snape, her sister, this obsessive thing with James and then being a Muggleborn in times like these so I was trying to show that :P

Thanks for the great review though!

-Kiana


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