Hi there! I favourited this story a while ago but I decided to leave it a review only now because one, I felt rather sorry for its lack of reviews especially since it's such a /fantastic/ story (but more on that later) and two, I was just in the mood for reviewing. Nevertheless, I would just like to start off with that I love, love, loved the way you started this story! I'm just so used to most stories set in Hogwarts starting on the platform that I was pleasantly surprised when this didn't. Not to mention I really liked the whole character study thing at the very beginning of the chapter -- it really helped pull you in, because you already knew a bit about Rosemary and James before starting, and it just really reminded me of a Lily/James fic (The Life and Times, have you heard of it?) that starts off similarly and that just made me love this whole thing after only a few paragraphs ;p
Speaking of characters, I honestly just adored everyone in this chapter. Rosemary is already shaping up to be a great main character -- she's not so perfect that you think she can't /possibly/ be realistic and at the same time, she has enough flaws to make you love her for it. I'm not entirely sure if that made sense, sorry, just understand that I love her so far xD James, too -- while he was an arrogant prat (to put it lightly!) he was still fun to read, as was his and Rosemary's banter. The whole love-hate thing (lots of emphasis on the latter and barely any on the former -- for now, muahaha!) is so overused but for some reason, their banter was simply /refreshing/ to read because they genuinely disliked each other, and not for totally stupid reasons as is often the case with some fics nowadays.
Lastly, your writing in general was just lovely to read :') It hit the right balance between enough description, natural dialogue and just natural flow in general and oh my gosh, I do love this story so far. I rarely start on a story only one chapter in but I can already tell this will be very, very promising! Can't wait for the next chapter~
Author's Response: Oh my goodness, thank you thank you thank you for the review! I love hearing feedback (especially long feedback) and this just made my day. And yeah, I have heard of The Life and Times! It's actually one of my favorite fics, and it's sort of what inspired the little character study at the beginning. I was actually a bit unsure about putting it in there, but your review has now reassured me it's fine.
I'm really happy you like Rosemary. I'm attempting to write her so she's not entirely likable while still being intriguing for readers, but it's really hard. I think I'm going to toughen her up and be the instigator in a couple things, so we'll see how that all works out.
Thank you for the very wonderful review again! I promise a new chapter will be up soon -- or at least after the staff holiday, haven't quite decided yet. :)