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Review:ReeBee says:
Hi there! Here with your requested review!!

Okay, it is super interesting!! :D Don't worry about that at all :) I'm so gripped! Very interesting! The way you've written it- u have somehow managed to keep things mysterious without the use of a cliffhanger! Its an impressive feat! :)

Emotion- Draco's, yes, but Anaxandra's is a bit unclear. I understand that u might her to be a bit detached, but, a bit more emotion from her side would do wonders :) I'm not saying that its completely devoid of emotions, but, a bit more insight into how she feels would be good. I mean, her families just been killed, there must be something. Like how something draco does reminds her of her father, or just something small :) That would give some depth to your characters and make Anaxandra more realistic :) Draco is characterised extremely well :)

Also, when it switches over to Anaxandra's thoughts- after the line break, u used the word 'Anaxandra' a bit too much. Maybe try using more pronouns- that would help with flow :) Though, flow in general was quite good :)

Well- thats all I've got! :) It was a truly amazing chapter! :)

Feel free to rerequest :)

-ReeBee

Author's Response: Thanks for the help. I'll be sure to figure out Ana's emotions and fix her name. Again, thanks for the review.

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