Wow, this piece, wow.
The whole persona built up behind the devil was really amazing. I think the whole combination of Venice, royalty and nobility and the difference between open and closed sexuality and the trends of it in history was really fantastic. You just built this sort of decadent backdrop to him that suggests temptation, which would make what the women do what they did, and the detail of that was really fantastic.
Iíve been trying to think of a way to describe the devilís narrative but I am yet to think of the right adjective. Either way, the sort of sinister and egotistical air was really fantastic. It matched his character really brilliantly, and the way he was uncaring and cold at the same time as wanting to be close physically was a really interesting combination to observe.
The way the devil gave up his love for luxury and decided to see the lower levels of life at the workhouses was a really great twist. Your description of it there was really brilliant and caught that anxious and hopeless air of the inmates really well. It was almost as if I could sense their yearning to escape, and no wonder Kendra was seduced by him because he was an escape to her.
Iím really annoyed at myself for not picking out the signs it was her before with her being a Muggleborn, her poor roots and the dates, and now I look back on it, I have to credit you for the way you wove in those little hints as it was a great touch. Iím still trying to figure out whether he ever loved her or not, but I suppose this is one of those situations where love can be mistaken for so many other things.
Ahahahaha, Iím still mind blowing over this! So Albus is the son of some evil devil spirit? I really loved that twist and how you wove it into the family curse of all those deaths and disputes as it gives a perfect reason for them now.
This was another fantastic story of yours!
Author's Response: Hi! :)
Ah, I'm so glad you liked it. And I'm glad I could count on you to catch onto the historical trends and ideas. :D I'm so pleased you liked them and the details of the historical context as I loved writing it (and history in general, as you can probably tell!)
Sinister and egotistical are great ways to put it! I'm glad you enjoyed his character and how inhuman yet also loving in a strange way he was. I really enjoy writing these kinds of spooky, odd characters who can't really be defined by normal human terms.
I'm pleased you liked the factory, working class part of it as I thought that would be an interesting twist that suited the era. I've been studying 'North and South' by Gaskell in class so that was a bit of an inspiration. :) You're right, he was an escape, and in kind of a creepy way I think it was a good relationship, or at least fun for me to explore.
Ah thanks! :D What I was secretly hoping for from this story was for people to read the last line, and then have an epiphany type moment where everything just clicks together. That's a little how it was for me writing it, and it's great to know if had that sort of effect. Yes, love here is a little more conditional and complicated, but I think that he did care for her, in a way. He certainly dwelled on her for a long time, whether that's love or not.
Haha yes! I feel like Albus' powers and intelligence are a little too good to be true in a way, and this sort of parenthood might explain why he's so exceptional and his siblings weren't necessarily.
Thanks so much for a thoughtful and wonderful review, and I'm so excited you liked it! :D