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Review:marauderfan says:
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Wow - this is so touching. I absolutely love the way you wrote Narcissa in this - her emotions and loneliness and regret came across so clearly. I loved that she was addressing Tonks. I'd sort of forgotten they were related until reading this!

I think the metaphor of Narcissa as ice is so fitting too. The abstract way you described her and her sisters is lovely, each of them with their own time of day too. That was really beautiful.

Narcissa's feelings of confinement were really well written - the way she watches Tonks from afar, helping with her injury on the playground, attending her Auror graduation ceremony - it's evident she wants to get to know her niece, in which she can see the best parts of Andromeda, Bellatrix, their parents and even herself, but she can't. And the end was SO sad, how she's been there the whole time but won't let Andromeda know, because she is at the same time too proud and too weak to talk to her again after everything that happened... I hope that she did talk to her sister again later, since they're both so alone at the end here.

The way you wrote this was really good as well - I think the lack of dialogue also speaks to Narcissa's loneliness and sense of distance from everything. The imagery in this piece is wonderful.

Nice use of that quote from the Great Gatsby, by the way - that's very Narcissa!

great work on this! I'm so glad I read it!

Author's Response: Hola! :)

Aw, thank you! :) I really enjoyed writing this story, it really flowed well through my mind to the page, and it's lovely to get such nice feedback on it. I'm glad you liked Narcissa and her emotions. I know what you mean, I had forgotten too and then remembered when the idea for this came into my head.

I'm pleased you liked the metaphors and symbolism, and found it beautiful. :) Thank you!

I feel like this version of Narcissa would feel very trapped - by herself and by her family, and it's good to know that came across. I felt so sorry that she didn't get to know Tonks while she was alive, and there's no chance to make up for that. Ah I know, I considered having her talk to Andy but felt like she wasn't ready yet: like you said, she's too proud and too weak. There might be hope someday, though. :) I've been considering writing a sequel one-shot as it feels quite sad to just leave it like this.

I've never really written something with no dialogye like this, and I love how you think it compliments Narcissa's loneliness and the lack of personal connections in her life. That's a wonderful way to analyze it. :)

I thought so right away when I saw the quote! It was just made for her. :P

Thanks for a wonderful review! :D

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