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Review:monstrosity says:
Hey! Here from the RRT :)

Andromeda has been one of my all time favourite characters in the Harry Potter books. She such a maverick in a time and place where she could be killed for the things that she wanted to do.

One thing that I find particularly interesting about this chapter is the fact that although they are children, they seem to have an adult-ish air about them. Andromeda is eight and already wary about potential engagement. When I was her age I thought that boys were the most disgusting creatures on earth. The thought of marrying them hadn't even entered my head at all.

Bella isn't even a teenager and she's already preaching about blood purity. It goes to show how deeply those values were instilled in the Black family. She's quite scary even at such a young age. The part of her magic going slightly out of control sent a shiver down my spine. I spotted the hint at irony when Bella calls Andromeda mad when she herself is not the sanest person in the world. I quite liked that.

I also liked how Lucius is portrayed as a sniveling, scared boy as opposed to a pompous prat. Out of all the children, he seemed the most oblivious to what was really going on. He still had that essence of childhood within him that none of the girls seemed to possess. You had Bella already privy to family politics, Andromeda wary of her mother's antics and Narcissa who was a rather perceptive girl who knew exactly how to tread on the eggshells. It sort of goes to prove the popular theory that women have a better mental and analytical ability than men, I suppose.

Your Andromeda was one that I really loved. She's so lively despite living in a dreary household full of rules and pride to uphold. I laughed at the bit where she made faces at the family portraits and I could really picture this little girl full of pluck like a ray of sunshine in a dark, black (ahem, excuse the pun) household.

This was a really interesting chapter and I shall be moving on to read the rest! Amazing work, as always :)

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad that you like Andromeda as she is a favourite of mine too!

I'm glad you picked up on the adult like air of them because I do believe that in pureblood families they wouldn't really tolerate anything childish that much or really allow them to play due to it being improper or whatever, so I wanted to reflect that here. Haha, so did I, but then these purebloods do need to make good matches :P

I think with someone like Bella, she must have already formed her views about muggleborns at a very early age otherwise she wouldn't have reacted in such an extreme way later on. Haha, I enjoyed adding in that bit of irony because I wanted to show her extent of insanity by not recognising her own :P

Lucius always seemed to come off as a bit of a follow to me, hence the pompousness about him because it seemed a bit of an act really. I guess with him and Cissy I wanted to show that they could have been something else if they tried to be that but they didn't and weren't strong enough and ended up following the pack. Yes, I do enjoy that theory :P But I suppose in my head canon Lucius is an only child so he wasn't really forced to grow up by the arrival of other siblings.

Great pun! I'm glad you liked the faces part because I wanted to show she was already rebelling against this image of composure she was meant to convey and it was a lot of fun to include that in a child like way.

Thanks for the amazing compliments and review, they really made me smile! ♥

-Kiana


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