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Review:Red_headed_juliet says:
Oh wow. Wonderful. I love it. At first I was a little worried that you were going to make the incubus too vampiric, but then you didn't and I was happy.

The story is beautifully told. I'm normally more comfortable with third person, but this narrative was exquisite. It was truly beautiful. You succeeded in making me feel as though an unearthly creature was speaking to me, or at least telling the story, and that is not an easy feat! I read on with interest throughout the entire thing, and I don't think you had any frivolous sentences. You had wonderfully diversified sentences, utilizing both complex and simple sentences to get the job done, and very well at that.

Then... the ending. I thought it was going to be Grindelwald, but then you had him be a son of light, and I was like.. no way! But in the end it was totally yes way. I do love this very very much, and if you didn't win the challenge, or haven't won the challenge, then it must be a ridiculously close call, because this is awesome. I'm a sucker for tragedy, and I love the bitter sweet ending. The idea of immortality always seemed like a curse to me, and i love the idea of an incubus following the woman who scorned him for his true self in spite of all the contention. And then loving (or at least, caring about) his son as much as he could, just... wonderful.

ANYWAYS! If you can't tell, I really like it. Very nicely done. Bravo! It was a pleasure review swapping with you. +]

Author's Response: Hi! :) Thank you! Yeah, I felt like they were quite different creatures, vampires almost have it better in a way, and I wanted to make the incubus unique!

Wow, I'm so pleased you liked it! I really enjoyed writing it and playing with the language, and it's wonderful to know it came across as unearthly. Hearing you liked the language and style is really helpful, I wasn't sure if it was too much or not, so I'm glad to know it was effective. :)

Haha yes way! I'm glad you liked that little twist and explanation of these especially powerful wizards like Grindelwald. I enjoy tragedy a lot too - especially writing it - and agree that immortality would be awful, especially in the form of an incubus who doesn't really participate in society but exists on the fringes. I really enjoyed writing about his son as well, and imagining the incubus watching for all these key moments. :)

Thank you so much for this brilliant review and for swapping with me! :D

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