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Review:LightLeviosa5443 says:
R&R Round 3!

The Al that you have portrayed in this story is so unique, he's cold, but he's also caring, it's a strange mix of both, in my opinion. I can see where he cares, and where his softer interior is, but all he shows is the cold exterior. If that makes any sense at all. I actually kind of love this version of Albus. It fits a Slytherin persona perfectly and I don't think you could've written him any better.

I must admit, reading his letter to her was so upsetting, and especially when he started talking about how liberated he felt being free from her. I mean, I can understand not caring for someone anymore, but she didn't get a chance to enjoy her summer like he did, because she focused on him, she didn't admire other boys.

I also felt bad for his dorm mates when they were joshing him and he snapped at them, I can understand their looks of hurt as it would be rare form for Albus, and I can only imagine how they felt to actually show the looks of hurt.

I can't wait to see how you end this story, it's a really good one. I must admit, I think I like Melinda's POV better. But that might just be because she's nicer!

xoxo LL

Author's Response: Thanks for another review! :)

Albus is, at heart, a true Slytherin. He is logical and calculates every move before he makes it. That's why he doesn't really like Melinda's quirks--he doesn't understand them. At the beginning of the relationship, he was less cold, but over time, he changed. I am so glad that you thought I portrayed him accurately!

Yeah, the letter was kind of brutal. Maybe too brutal, but I wanted it to be a bit dramatic. And Albus lashing out at his roommates was absolutely uncalled for, but he was understandably upset. After all, no one really likes to be told that they aren't enough for someone. When Melinda broke up with Albus, she was set free, but he was bound by his anger that SHE was the one who broke up with HIM.

Thanks again!! :)

~UnluckyStar57


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