Aww Farmgirl, THE FEEELS!
A great chapter, I like how we are given someone elses perspective on Sadie, especially one of the twins, it shows that there is much more to them than meets the eye. It will be interesting to see how Sadie interacts with Fred after this chapter. I also think it was great that we had a different perspective because it gave us an insight of what others were thinking of this young girl who had already lived through too much. It seems they understand her better than she may think. It may just take some time, huh?
Speaking of the twins, I knew you would do them justice as you are a huge Weasley Twin fan but you have seriously done a great job! The line about Harry Ron and Hermione getting drawn to trouble is so completely right. And the sneaking of the lollies in Ron and Harry's knapsacks, you can definitely see them doing that, that it completely fits!! You have done a great job on their characterization, which I wouldn't doubt at all :D
And Sadie's flashback. That was heartbreaking. I am so so close to my family, that to be in that type of situation would completely rip me apart, and I feel for Sadie extremely. You have written the scene very effectively, it carries a lot of emotion and we know what is happening, but you only use a few choice words, its very good :)
Something that I think you could possibly work some more on is the nit-picky description bits. As they are running, is it dark and crowded, having to dodge others? Does Fred ever find out who the person who elbowed him is? Is the moon out and illuminating the place they stop etc? Just small things like that to help heighten the scene :)
Another great chapter as always, can't wait to see what comes next! :D
Author's Response: I am so very sorry for two things. One I hurt your feels. And two, I took so long to respond to this review. Can you forgive me? For at least one of them?
I am glad that, despite the feels, you enjoyed the chapter. And you caught that I was trying to set up a slightly different path for Fred and Sadie to interact than the rest of them. Good eyes! And yes, I was also trying to show how others are seeing Sadie at this point in the story.
Awww. You thought I did the twins justice? COOL! THANKS! I do try, given how much I love them, but I worry that I do it right. I want them to have depth and be more than just card-board cut out characters who are basically the same person.
The trio really do get in SO much trouble, don't they? Makes you wonder what others outside their group think about them - was fun to look at that here, with the twins. And I just had to put the smuggling of the treats in. I love the books, I really do, but one thing that kinda makes me mad sometimes is that the trio never though to make more use of the twins! Here are two of the most devious minds on the planet, and they never ask for advice? Why didn't they invite the twins along on their year of hiding/camping/looking for horcruxes? Surely they could have been of use?
I worried about the flashback, that it would be too disturbing. And I feel like such an awful person, killing off all those people I created and she cares about! You are right, thought. It basically DID rip Sadie apart. She became a different person after that, sadly. Still a good person, but different.
Details. I'm finding I'm not very good at those. I can see it in my head, I forget to let others in to see it as well. I will make sure to work on that.
Thank you so much! I love your reviews. I hope you will want to keep reading.