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Review:MrsKatieGrint says:
Hey there!

Can I just say that you're superb? Lol okay, any who, I think that yes, this chapter was a filler, and to the point of plot, yes it was a little short in my opinion, BUT I think it goes to say that, 1 everyone needs filler chapters here and there, to help with characterization, and overall effect of what is to come, and 2 not every single day are you going to have an action packed day. If you do, you're probably tired all the time, and something is probably very wrong, haha.

I really love how Ellie's character is forming. At this point you're getting more definite with her, and its making it a lot easier for the readers to really understand and get into her head. Also, I think its really cool how you are modernizing her. From mentioning other fandoms, to her slight coffee addiction, I think you are making Ellie a character that the readers can really relate to on one aspect or another, and its just really cool for me.

Now, the only bump I kind had with this chapter, and it was only minor! Was that when Scorpius and Rose are talking about timetables and interfering with Quidditch, I was super confused for the longest time until I realized you were talking about prefect rounds. So maybe go and clarify that somehow? It was just a mess, kinda, in the sense that I had no clue what was going on until you mentioned Scorpius switching shifts with who ever, and later on when Ellie asked Scorpius how Head Boy was. So maybe I'm just real dumb, and didn't pick up on your context clues well, and in that case, feel free to ignore all this.:P

Also, I was super sad because there was no Albus.:( I'm so sad too, that he's a harder character for you to write, but honestly, you wouldn't be able to tell that from reading your story.

All in all, I think this was a wonderful filler chapter, and I can't wait, as always to see how this progresses!(: Cheers!

~Katie

Author's Response: Oh, you! *blushes* You really must stop being so nice to me! I'll get a big head! I did want to use this chapter for mostly characterisation - not Ellie's, but her friends'. I was feeling like I didn't really know Scorpius all that well, so I gave writing him a scene a go to see what happened. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Fillers aren't so bad when they're sandwiched in between two plot-heavy chapters, which at the moment is not the case. I guess that's why this chapter has me so worried.

I'm glad Ellie is really growing. She's very well-defined in my head, so I'm constantly worried about saying something that will skip all the development and make her seem less rounded.

That's actually a fantastic point! It's easy enough to fix - I shall make a note of that in my draft, so that when I go back to edit, I remember to fix that!

Albus was sent to the naughty corner for being difficult to write. Perhaps he'll receive a cameo for being so well-behaved in the next chapter.

Thanks so much for this amazeballs review!


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