By golly, Gina, only you would know how to start a chapter with a hundred Quirky Girls stampeding after Albus: "for Circe's sake, don't take off your clothes if it gets hot. It only makes them run faster"? MY UNSHAVEN FEET, that's catchier than pneumonia on a rainy day! And to include the scary fangirl craziness of THIS generation to an HPFF? I was blown out of my socks; Br, that's scarier than anything I've read thus far on the interweb.
Seriously, half the time when I'm reading your fics, I'm staring at the screen completely paralyzed (save finger: le scroll) open-mouthed, catching flies... and moths... and these tiny beetles with sticky legs; they come swarming at night (Lord help me if those windows don't hold)... I DIGRESS!
Gyah! Clemence feels so tangible! I can feel the clammy air of the prefects' shower room, the cold wet tile against my feet. You create such vividity, transporting the reader all the way there into the world (pulling out at the end of the chapter is the most confusing thing in the world: like I've just been sucked back out and plopped onto my bed... I have to slap myself awake a few times before I get it).
. Ah... Now that comment above sounds a lot more fangirly and crazy-headedly obsessive now that I've read the rest of the chapter; my golly... You were always phenomenally great at writing shower-scenes! Granted, it's not an outright shower scene like from Game, but by GOLLY, GINA~ That was a hot, raunchy, crazy-my-head-still-hurts-from-hitting-the-brick-wall (oh wait, no, that was Clemence)... AH, the tension is high strung, on high!
Blub-blub... I couldn't have seen that coming (well, I guess I might have, but I'd expected it a lot further down)! ALWAYS THE ELEMENT OF SURPRISE~ Aaaah, and the smirk at the end?! GYAH, I'm a blubbering mess and I'm going to shut up now.
Much love and nonsensical acronyms,
P.S. I love how your chapter titles are like cocky little smirkers, that make you go, "Ooh" by the end of the chapter.
Author's Response: I think anyone on tumblr would attest to the fearsome force of fangirlism 8D Ahh, back when I wrote this chapter, tumblr wasn't even very big--it was still all Twilight.
Ewww, ack ack, tiny beetles D: My whole house howls at the sight of a spider. I'm imagining you under the glow of a laptop under many many mosquito nets.
I should hope Clemence is tangible or else she would be a ghost 8D That'd be quite the plot twist and I wouldn't put it past me to write that. I did have a lot of fun trying to transport people to the, um, scene. And snogging. Mostly the latter. This is sort of a shower scene isn't it? I refer to it as the changing room scene, because they do end up in an actual shower at some point.
I decided on the kiss *as I wrote the chapter* hilariously enough, and setting precedent for impromptu snogging was the best decision I made.
♥ all the smirking