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Review:lia_2390 says:
This is a fascinating line to take in this particular story. Before you, many writers ventured to include Sirius's flight from his childhood home, but I've never come across one like yours.

At first glance, I wondered what you could have written about this theme in 500 words. However, I found it was so packed with things, I felt I needed to read it twice.

The biggest question I had about it was 'why now?'. He'd lived in the house for seventeen years. Why, on the eve of his departure, he'd stop and look at an old writing desk. Was he looking for a reason to stay? Would that writing desk give him a lasting semblance of hope for his family? Himself, maybe? On the flip side, the desk could have given him what he needed, and placed the final nail in his proverbial coffin. He'd already packed up his things, but something about this movements that night felt hesitant to me.

Fantastic example of showing without telling, by the way. The description was beautifully written and quite a shock. I never expected to see a boggart pop out of the drawer, and obviously, neither did Sirius. It was a chilling reminder of the times. In spite of Sirius's portrayal, there is always something he feared.

I'm glad I sorted us for the exchange. I enjoyed reading this one-shot.

:)

Lia

Author's Response: Hi Lia! Sorry this response took ages!

When I saw the announcement for the competition, this idea sprang to mind basically immediately. It just begged to be written, and I'm glad it turned out as creepy as I'd envisioned in my head.

I do think there are plenty of unanswered questions that just couldn't be explored in 500 words. I think my interpretation of why Sirius stopped to look at the desk was similar to yours; he realized that he'd never be back to this house (or so he thought) and couldn't resist taking it all in during that moment. As soon as he got too close, though, he remembered why he needed to run, to get closer to his friends and further away from the thing that threatened them. He realized what really mattered.

Thanks for your lovely review :)

-Amanda


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